Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, success in a person’s job has become much more important in our lives. By achieving success in jobs, people can indicate their importance to the people around them. However, there is a controversy between people about how to become successful, whether by studying hard or having strong relations. In my opinion, having strong relations can be much more important. I will explain the reasons in the following essay.
To begin with, communicating well with people can broaden perspective toward the occurring events in the world. In this way, a person with many relationships can get new ideas, learn many things, create a company with their help. Thus, cooperation among them could lead to great success in their job. One of the people I know tried to communicate with a lot of people, especially in the university. One day, he tried to establish a company in the web applications field and he succeeded because he asked help from the people with whom he communicated, to improve his ideas. Now, he owns a big company with lots of employees. To conclude, his ability to create strong relations with others helped him become a great manager of his own company.
Moreover, making connections lead to improving social connections. In other words, when a person knows many people and has social interactions with them, it could lead to improve interactions with co-workers and customers as well. For instance, I had a friend back in university. She easily made new friends and get to know them well back then. Now, she is working at the restaurant, One day in the restaurant, there was a man shouting and complaining about the quality of food served. So due to her communication skills, she handled this chaos in the restaurant with a peaceful solution. In sum, this ability helped her to become a good waitress.
In conclusion, although, studying hard is necessary to become an expert in a specific field, but strong communication skills are much more beneficial to succeed in work. Not only does it broaden one’s perspective, but also it improves social interactions.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 152, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding people'?
Suggestion: the surrounding people
...people can indicate their importance to the people around them. However, there is a controversy betwee...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, so, then, thus, well, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1740.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 348.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88853570613 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.557471264368 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 528.3 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.9753105175 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.8571428571 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5714285714 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.14285714286 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201646101425 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0597640914192 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0397105525617 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120888974197 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0524266482716 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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