Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? For the successful development of a country, it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children (five to ten years old) than to spend money on universities. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
From the first day of our presence on earth, success and development have been a crucial concern. Without a doubt, one of the key structures of development is education, as it enables human being to explore and accumulate knowledge through generations. In spite of the consensus on the importance of education, there are contrary opinions about the most important stage in education. I myself believe that educaiton of very young students is more important than higher educations like in universities or colleges. In the following paragraphs I try to elaborate on two reasons.
First, I think that children in young age are easier to teach, and the marginal effect of their education is higher than adults. In fact, because children are in their initial stage of learning, their mind does not resist against new thoughts and knowledge, so teachers can teach them easily prepapre them to get the fundamental principles. Also, I think that as education goes forward, the marginal effect of that knowledge decreases. With that in mind, it is more efficeint to spend money on children's education to equip them with necessary and fundamental wisdom, rather than spending budget on advanced university materials which would benefit only in special fields of science.
The second and the more important, children will going to make our future society, hence the level of their knowledge and wisdom is going to have a decisive role in success and development of that society. In fact, if we invest on education in younger ages, people will grow with more wisdom from their early stage of life. Therefore, learning complex skills and elaborate concepts would be achieved easier because these things happen gradually and one should be raised with enough education over time to reach to that level. This is why nowadays we see advanced countries are investing huge amounts of their budgets on the elementary education. Actually, in contrast to some countries which make children struggling with heavy homeworks, in European and North American countries children are free to play, expericence and interact with their mates in elementary schools. For obvious reasons, that would pay off in future because their next generations are able to learn more social skills and build a more interactive society.
In total, I think that education in younger ages should be far more concerned than advance studies in university. While advanced levels of education would only pay off limited people in limited fields, primary education would form a more sophisticated socitey in future, making it possible to even pursue more of advanced education then. For those reasons, I would recommend investing in our childre education, rather than saving money for their future college education.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 50, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'go'
Suggestion: go
...d and the more important, children will going to make our future society, hence the l...
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Line 3, column 344, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to complex'
Suggestion: to complex
...arly stage of life. Therefore, learning complex skills and elaborate concepts would be ...
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Line 4, column 260, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...would form a more sophisticated socitey in future, making it possible to even pursue more...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, hence, if, second, so, then, therefore, while, i think, in contrast, in fact, in contrast to, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 8.0752688172 285% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2323.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 445.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2202247191 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69656366962 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521348314607 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 735.3 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.7375857359 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.055555556 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7222222222 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.11111111111 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237046828443 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0725256073971 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0548858219016 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144164452032 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0211242828861 0.0645574589148 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 11.7677419355 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 58.1214874552 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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