It is most people's dream to have a successful career, but how do we achieve that goal? In order to become successful, some argue that people should try new things and take risks, but others think that it is better for people to do only what they know to do well. As for me, I strongly agree that successful people try new things and take risks rather than doing what they already know.
First, in order to be successful, people need to have to break through their obstacles, and trying new techniques can allow people to do so and make improvements. Take my job for example, as a general surgeon, we must constantly learn new techniques and update knowledge. Before, the laparotomy procedures, which cured disease by making a big incision through the patient's abdominal wall to gain access into the abdominal cavity, were the standard procedures, but the patients would suffer more pain and longer recovery time. Instead, the laparoscopic procedures, which can access the abdominal cavity by using only small holes made on the patient's abdominal wall, give patients less pain and faster recovery with the same treatment efficacy. The learning process for a new technique is time-consuming and tough, but those surgeons who were willing to try the new procedure and tackle with all the difficulties finally succeeded. They have better results and attract more patients than the surgeons who stick to the traditional laparotomy operations.
Secondly, it is important for people to seize the new opportunity to be successful, and trying new things enable them to see more opportunity. For instance, the owner of Honestbee company saw the needs from office workers in the big city, who did not have time and efforts to go grocery shopping. Therefore, it tried a different way of selling things by setting up the website and cooperating with a wide variety of supermarkets and retail stores. Customer can easily pick up items from the website, and it help do the shopping and deliver the products to them within one hour. The company is prospering and has expanded its business from Singapore to other cities in Southeast Asia. On the other contrary, many of the traditional stores have significant decrease in profits because they use the old way to do business but fewer customers go to the real stores for shopping nowadays.
Last but not least, to be successful, people have to be creative enough to keep up with the changing world, but doing what they already know only limits their scope of imagination. For example, Kodak used to be a big company in making cameras and camera films, but it did not expect the rapid advances and prevalence of digital cameras. Eventually, Kodak no longer existed in the market. Moreover, back to 10 to 20 years ago, Nokia cell phones were the best-selling cell phones everywhere, but Nokia failed to smell the growing trends toward smartphones, and ended up in a great loss. Apparently, only doing things people know how to do well often makes them think inside the box and does not prevent them from failure.
In conclusion, I believe that people who get final success are those who are willing to try new things and take risks, because it can enable them to make breakthroughs to solve difficult problems, to seize new opportunity, and to be creative to keep up with the changing world and distinguish them from ordinary people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 508, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'helps'?
Suggestion: helps
... pick up items from the website, and it help do the shopping and deliver the product...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, but, finally, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, as for, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 33.0 13.8261648746 239% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2807.0 1977.66487455 142% => OK
No of words: 572.0 407.700716846 140% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90734265734 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89045207381 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65702231691 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 282.0 212.727598566 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493006993007 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 869.4 618.680645161 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 12.0 1.86738351254 643% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.591729061 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.666666667 100.406767564 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2380952381 20.6045352989 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.38095238095 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.335135330061 0.236089414692 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108473298549 0.076458572812 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.123355948837 0.0737576698707 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213827087361 0.150856017488 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.153081110053 0.0645574589148 237% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 11.7677419355 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 86.8835125448 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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