Today we rely on technology in every aspect of our lives. Some people think that technology has made children less creative than they were in the past because children today are more dependent of technology than they were before. However, I strongly disagree with them. In my opinion, I believe that technology has helped children to be more creative than they were in the past. I will support my viewpoint with two reasons.
First of all, children today have access to the internet and they can find anything they want to learn. Their unlimited curiosity to learn new things and how they work are mostly answered by internet sources. When they know about new discoveries or something interesting they immediately look for it online. Their knowledge boundaries expands and quest for new things bring up creative and innovative ideas. For example, if a child is interested in moon and sun and searches for them on internet he will also learn about solar system, other planets and galaxies with cool demonstration video. On other hand, internet was not available in the past to the children and their knowledge was mostly limited to educational books and from newspaper or magazines. They had limited access to unbounded data sources and knowledge discoveries and that's why their ideas were limited. Thus children today are more creative and innovative than they were before.
Second of all, children today have cool comic books and fictional tv programs from that they are inspired a lot. For instance, there are a lot tv programs for children today that includes super heroes, robots and cool scientific experiments. These programs influence them a lot to be interested in science, math, and also robotics. This is how they are introduced with new advanced technologies and these shows make children think about more advanced future and how their life would be when they are no longer children. In contrast, children in the past didn't have that much tv programs or comic books that are related to robotics or spaceships. Although they had nice story books which also helped to shape a children's mind but having familiarity with advance technology has more advantage and greater impact on mind.
In conclusion, the issue of whether technology has made children more creative than there were in the past is complex. Some has suggested that it has made children less innovative because of technology dependency on everything. Nevertheless, I still contend that technology is a blessing for everyone as well children and it has made children more creative and imaginative.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, nevertheless, second, so, still, thus, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2156.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 424.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08490566038 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64613392365 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.469339622642 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 671.4 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.9773168456 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.0 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2727272727 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.45454545455 5.45110844103 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.308775198447 0.236089414692 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108206904537 0.076458572812 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0914315238473 0.0737576698707 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232902433994 0.150856017488 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105662194915 0.0645574589148 164% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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