I basically agree with the statement that Television has destroyed communication among friends and family. As one of the most significant inventions in the 20st Century, the TV has changing our life greatly. While most of the people were obsessed by the programs on TV with ignorance of its side effects which ruined our minds and attitudes toward our society. Now we should reconsider these effects the TV brought to us, I will address my views ther in after.
To begin with, the TV changed our ways of recieving information. Or to be specific, as we are watching TV, we merely foucusing on the stories and news whatever it shows to us while the consideration of ourselves seems to be negelected. There is a specific and vivid words to describe these people as "TV potatoes", lying ong the sofa with the most comfortable way which looks like a potatoe on the sofa while the mind of the people were gong by the wind, and also, the answers to the problems and issues on TV are blowing in the wind. There was a time that the Chinese boycotted Janpanese products all over the China, most of their anger were fueled by the programs on TV which unilateraly boradcasted the Japanese wanted to take back an island which was controversial between China and Japan. Thus the ethnic mood was activated. While these people ingnored the fact that most of the japanese prodcuts selling in China were made in China. This behavior would affects Chinese workers' income seriously. Thus the news on TV would have a significant effect on people, as it leave no room for their own consideration.
In additon, as our tastes of TV programs vary, people in one family would be more insulated by each other. My sister in colleges said that there were two TVs at her home. One for her parents while another is her own. Because their parents fel like to watch the old movies while she was a big Japanese cartoon fan who spent most of her leisure time on the Cartoons. Then she found it was diffcult to chat with her parents as thire daily concertrations were totally different. Now she found they are obstacled with the gap caused by the TV.
More over, the TV also affects friendship as friends would not talk with each other more when they vary from the tastes of TV. My brother suffered from this problem. As he was in high school, he was a huge fan of football while his friends who playing footballs together would not share the taste of TV programs. As his friends felt like watching live shows of celebrities while my brother found is was extremely boring as he even had no intersest in celebrities' scandals ,let alone their personal lives. While he found he could not insert a word whe their friends was disscussing the topic of live shows. In the end, he was insulated by his friends even they would not pass the ball immediately on th pitch.
In all ,I belive the TV has ruined our lives as it changed opur lives and seprated people who are not close with each other like before.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, so, then, thus, while, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 52.1666666667 144% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2452.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 533.0 407.700716846 131% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60037523452 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80487177365 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50800281286 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 263.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493433395872 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 748.8 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.51792114695 284% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.1472438037 48.9658058833 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.08 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.32 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.08 5.45110844103 38% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0809190511944 0.236089414692 34% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0335534358357 0.076458572812 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.094627413901 0.0737576698707 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0546182637414 0.150856017488 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0514483621446 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.4 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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