Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
In a democratic society, all of the people should be involved in making crucial decisions about the country. Personally, I believe that today young people play a leading role in making such kinds of decisions. I feel this way for two important reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
Firstly, due to having access to different social media youth get involved in political matters more than before, which results in joining various political parties and groups. Through these parties, they exert influence in the government fundamental decisions. My own experience is a compelling example of this. Several years ago before the parliament election, I got familiar with one of the candidates through social media. I was literally fascinated by his plans and purposes for the future of the country. Since then, I have joined his fans’ political group, which has been growing each day. Now, this group is a well-known and influential group in the country and has extremely indirect positive effects on enacting major laws. This group, besides other political parties, which lead mostly by young ambitious people exert major influence in the political affairs and decisions associated with the future of society.
Secondly, nowadays most of the important influential government official posts are occupied by youngsters. People perceive that young people are able to make risky ambitious decisions that can be very beneficial for the country in the long-term. Although in the past the prevailing belief was that old and ripe people can better manage the country because of their more experiences, this opinion has been overridden recently. Therefore in most of the elections, the young individuals win more than old people do. For example, in my country, approximately 70 percent of the government cabinet and minsters consist of youth. In this way, they affect in the society's affairs increasingly in comparison with the past.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that today young persons have more effect on making important decisions because they are more involved in political affairs in favor of media and the positive insight toward young people's ability on making risky profitable decisions.
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Suggestion: Therefore,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, for example, i feel, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1870.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 352.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3125 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73284823078 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.534090909091 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 576.0 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.7665924953 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.888888889 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5555555556 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181737799303 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0554083206481 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0408274325134 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117981304255 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0117004420158 0.0645574589148 18% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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