Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Educating childeren is more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking web site.
it goes without saying that in such a sophisticated world development of technology plays the prominent role in people's lives. new electronic devices such as mobiles, X box, Laptops, etc., and numerous social networks affect in live's pattern. some people may hold the (view) idea that the advent of the technology makes educating more difficult than in the past. However, some others may take an opposite view and believe that it makes educating easier than in the past. So, from my own perspective using various devices, social networks and any kind of technology make educating more easier than in the past. On the countless reasons and examples, I will present the most essential and conspicuous ones here.
The First exquisite point to be mentioned is that using many different electronic devices such as mobiles, gaming devices, laptop and joining to various groups and networks significantly increase the EQ (Emotional q ..) of children which causes more compatibility and flexibility of children (them) to cope with different situations. For example, when the children join the social network they communicate with a wide range of people who has a special character. They can familiarize with different associations such as scientific associations which enhance children's knowledge about its process and activities. therefore, children become talent and clever to educate in school and university while these opportunities did not available in the past.
The second important point is that using different technologies help children to develop in different aspects and to improve their multi-task characteristic. when children do various tasks in a day they are able to do more complex and numerous tasks instead of one task. As they should study many books in a wide spectrum context, it is important to be able to handle themselves to do different tasks while in the past the number of tasks was limited.
the third reason is that many of the games, social network, and mobile apps are in the direction of teaching different concepts of science. Thus, following them is a helpful medium for children to educate easier than in the past when there was no teaching equipment and facilities.
In conclusion, I strongly supported the idea that the development of technology makes education easy and enjoyable than in the past. However, using them have some disadvantages that are not deniable. new devices and various groups and social networks can improve the children's brain to educate easier and effective.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, third, thus, while, for example, in conclusion, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2110.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 403.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23573200993 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84594483773 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501240694789 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 657.9 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.2144756532 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.052631579 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2105263158 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.89473684211 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233088876315 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0745799346685 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.053452276579 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1338916502 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0254118992035 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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