Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
People love their celebrities like famous entertainers and athletes, and they always have passion to know more about their life styles. A question might arise is that whether this love disturb celebrity's lives. As it is a moot point, there might not be a general agreement on this topic. However, personally, I rest on the belief that celebrities deserve to have more privacy than they have now. In the following, two reasons are put forth to clarify my personal perspective.
The first illustration which can help me to develop my personal opinion is that celebrities do not have control on their secret life. Broadly speaking, most of the people allow themselves to reveal celebrities' secrets without getting permission of them, such as their photos, their travels, their parties, and forth. There is a maxim that says, "the more famous you are, the more careful you should be". To elucidate more, they do not have freedom to do whatever they want. So they do not have this opportunity to do a violence which can break the society lows because should they act against lows, all members of society will get informed of their action as soon as possible, and they certainly get punishment. Hence, they deserve to have more freedom for their personal lives.
Also, it cannot go unnoticed that celebrity's families are bothered of people's intrusion. Generally speaking, their families as well as them, do not have tremendous amount of freedom for their lives. To clarify more, when a celebrity goes to an amusement park to spend a good time with his wife and child, people prevent them to spend their time together, by asking for taking picture with celebrity, or asking for his signature. These kinds of people's love can hamper the celebrity's family to feel comfortable in public places, so they feel more resentment and disgust. For instance, there was an interview with one of the celebrity's family, his family complained about their low privacy, and people intruding their personal life prevent celebrity to assign enough time for his family.
In the light of above-mentioned reasons, I am a proponent of that society should give more privacy to celebrities because not only are they normal people who need to have a personal lives, but also people should respect their families comfort. That is why it is strongly recommended that people should stop intruding celebrity's lives.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
People love their celebrities like famou...
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Line 3, column 57, Rule ID: PERSONAL_OPINION_FRIENDSHIP[1]
Message: Use simply 'opinion'.
Suggestion: opinion
...tration which can help me to develop my personal opinion is that celebrities do not have control...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, so, well, broadly speaking, for instance, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2006.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 397.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05289672544 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61749572557 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.508816120907 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 626.4 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.5522934901 48.9658058833 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.444444444 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0555555556 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209693010913 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0862501545507 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0923448259146 0.0737576698707 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144504492508 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0764453833474 0.0645574589148 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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