Through history education has always played prominent role in individual’s lives and development of country, some people believes that if government spend more money on universities rather than education of very young children, it will help the country to prosper earlier. Others disagree with this point of view. In my view, for a more developed country, greater budget should be spend on children--five to ten years old. The reasons why I believe so are manifold, however, three of which, the have the greatest consequent are elaborated upon here under.
First and foremost, it is more effective to learn people at the young age because at this age children are more eager and enthusiastic about learning about all aspect of lives. For intense children should learn to manage their own money at the young age in order to prevent from being embroiled into financial crises due to inappropriate management in the future, therefore it is a great idea to prepare children for all hardship of lives from that age.
Another significant point that taken into consideration is, developing happens gradually not over one night. Thus, for a developed country, the governments should have long time planning. Also, a proper education system which will teach young children, how to act and behave, how to make a wise choice. Moreover, the governors should have programs that teach a student who to think in a logical way. For example, I have a friend who grow up in the United States. She claims that, in the kindergarten where she attended, there was a lot of different devices that she could use; These devices give her the idea which skill she is good at doing. Currently, she is by far the most motivated and determined student in our class due to her child-hood experience. Conversely, those pupils like me who their government pay more attention to its universities rather than educating in young age, still cast doubt on whether their choice was for this particular field of study was correct or not?
The last but not least, paying more attention in high university degree has a lots of deleterious effects on the society, healthy economy need wide range of workers and also some manual worker will always be needed, practical taring in more important in some industries for example in our country there is currently shortage of plumbers so government can do a lot to counteract these problem by spending more budget on the education of very young children in order to each children find their own path.
To make a long story short, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, I am a advocate of that a great amount of country budget should be used in education of children; Because children are the fruits of each society also, the reason that a country can prosper and flourish.
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- TPO 39 - integrated writing 3
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 387, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'spent'?
Suggestion: spent
...loped country, greater budget should be spend on children--five to ten years old. The...
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Line 2, column 51, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to people'
Suggestion: to people
...foremost, it is more effective to learn people at the young age because at this age ch...
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Line 3, column 382, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a logical way" with adverb for "logical"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...grams that teach a student who to think in a logical way. For example, I have a friend who grow ...
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Line 4, column 77, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a lot' or simply 'lots'?
Suggestion: a lot; lots
...attention in high university degree has a lots of deleterious effects on the society, ...
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Line 4, column 379, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this problem' or 'these problems'?
Suggestion: this problem; these problems
...o government can do a lot to counteract these problem by spending more budget on the educatio...
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Line 6, column 80, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Line 6, column 93, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...orementioned reasons, I am a advocate of that a great amount of country budget sh...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, first, however, if, moreover, so, still, therefore, thus, as for, for example, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2324.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 470.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94468085106 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74246653215 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544680851064 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 725.4 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 113.450687939 48.9658058833 232% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 145.25 100.406767564 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.375 20.6045352989 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.310761099872 0.236089414692 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0946592754289 0.076458572812 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0968774851611 0.0737576698707 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167405563032 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107829814112 0.0645574589148 167% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 11.7677419355 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 58.1214874552 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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