The life styles of people have been changed dramatically during the past few decades with the different phases of revolutions in terms of education, technology and development of the entire world. In the fast moving world, decision making is of paramount importance to survive successfully. Some people believe that in the past, young people depended too much on their parents while today they are better decision makers and others believe that young people are still poor decision makers. In my opinion young people have improved their skills related to decision making with the increased access to information, different opportunities they get to exercise their own decisions and the change of their mindset to be independent in choosing the options available.
To begin with, it is important to identify the access to information had made the lives of modern-day young people different from early days. That has brought people a better understanding about what is happening around them to make better decisions with a complete analysis based on the parameters identified through online research. For an example, the leading roles of many business organizations are the young people, they make radical decisions with a proper understanding on the market factors with the business management skills that they equipped with a systematic education and self-learning platforms. Additionally, education has marked a hurdle in the access to information via the technological improvements along with it.
Secondly, young people have gone through a wide range of experiences making them confident to think on their own. From the day they were born, they are moving close to the world more than their parents at their young age. During our grand parent’s regime, children were at home just playing with their siblings and running all around the village with no idea at all. However now the child has been used to adapt to different circumstances such as being at home alone, doing their own tasks on their own from their early age. Moreover, this has provided them with different opportunities to learn through mistakes from their childhood to be great decision makers when they are matured.
In conclusion, the changes in the social structure, development of technology and specially the mind set of people to take challenges and to learn from them have made young people more intelligent in terms of arriving to best decisions than the ancient days where young people had to live with the orthodox mindset.
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- TOEFL integrated writing The sea otter 85
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- TOEFL integrated writing: Dutch painter Rembrandt 3
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, while, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 9.8082437276 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2115.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 403.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24813895782 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78762225257 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511166253102 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 646.2 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.88285832 48.9658058833 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.071428571 100.406767564 150% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.7857142857 20.6045352989 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.92857142857 5.45110844103 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.477859656274 0.236089414692 202% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.17232922056 0.076458572812 225% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104573238031 0.0737576698707 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.295930768775 0.150856017488 196% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0956840322388 0.0645574589148 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 11.7677419355 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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