Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
From a broad perspective, in the current state of affairs we face, in which so complicated is the relationships that the communication among people has entirely changed, it is not far-fetched to presume that family relations cannot be excluded from this list. However, whether this complexity renders the juveniles more independent is considered as a contentious issue. There is a growing segment of people who contend that youths were more relied on their parents previously. I personally concur with this idea, and in the ensuing paragraph the rationale behind this statement will be further elaborated.
First and foremost, young people become more knowledgeable. There is no denying the fact that education plays paramount role in order to develop the sense of independence. According to the latest research attributing to Dr. Kevin Rude, a prominent and highly respected professor in the Department of Demography at the Macquarie University, the number of literate people has soared dramatically. His probe revealed that peak educated people rate reached 65% in 2016 which had a 30% growth relative to the last decade. These figures provide further legitimacy in order to demonstrate that modern society witnesses well-informed citizens who incline to build their lives based on their capabilities. Undoubtedly, having earned more knowledge, young people, as the next generation, find an unlimited access to wide array of information allowing them choose their own path without relying on the parents.
Another vital point which should be taken into consideration is that the structure of family has altered. Needless to say that in comparison to the past, families are reluctant to live in an extended form. Actually, due to fierce inter-connected relationships within the family members, children, to a great extent, were reliance on their family. Inherited job is an evident instance for such this connection which determine to what extent individuals were hindered to peruse their interests As a matter of fact, if the family members had not cooperated with each other, they would not have survived and this story made them inseparable. On the contrary, children in this era of time usually live in families that both their parents work and they have no other choice but learning how to deal with plethora of people from an early ages, from mundane daily issues to serious financial subjects. Under such circumstances, it comes as no surprise that juveniles opt to live separately as of they become 18 years old.
To wrap it up, it is more judicious to say that the more time passes, the more young people desire to become independent. This issue occurs not only owing to increasing the level of wisdom and knowledge, but also because of the revolution in family structure.
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- Some believe that one should spend more time being far away from the people we care about, because it is necessary for people to understand the importance of relationship of people we care about, while others think being away from people we care about can 43
- People s shopping habits depend more on the age group they belong to than any other factors To what extent do you agree or disagree 84
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 783, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'unlimited access'.
Suggestion: unlimited access
...ng people, as the next generation, find an unlimited access to wide array of information allowing t...
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Line 3, column 1014, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...arately as of they become 18 years old. To wrap it up, it is more judicious to s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, so, well, as a matter of fact, on the contrary, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2340.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 448.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22321428571 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90900201609 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 267.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595982142857 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 747.0 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.4483361328 48.9658058833 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.0 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8888888889 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88888888889 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155396710177 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.047269114162 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.041417902996 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0906235365701 0.150856017488 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0312958428581 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 58.1214874552 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.87 8.01818996416 123% => OK
difficult_words: 143.0 86.8835125448 165% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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