Decisions affect youngsters’ lives in a tremendous way. Young people need to decide about variety of issues such as their field of study, work and relationships. There are two perspectives toward decision making by young adults. Some people agree that in the past they were able to make decisions independently. Others disagree. Personally, I strongly believe that the young can make better decision about their own life comparing past. I would support this point of view by elaborating my own specific reasons as the following paragraphs.
To begin with, education broaden people's horizon. Nowadays, you as a young person can get great education in higher honorable universities and colleges. This opportunity improves your life style as well as your attitude toward life. In universities, not only pass we some professional courses but also we learn some personal and social skills such critical thinking and problem solving. The mentioned skills will help us to enjoy making better decision about our life. Additionally, I have seen many training videos on the social medias and websites produced by influencers which aim to help youngsters to make better decide in every stage of their lives. This kind of facilities was not available in the past decades.
Furthermore, young adults get independent more earlier than in the past. In pastime, families were so extended living in a same place and the father mostly was the financially responsible for all of the family. However, nowadays children when they reach their official age, they seek for a job and then live independently in a separate home. Consequently, this independency demands making decision which by time passing boost the ability of the children to make better decision.
To put the idea forward, we should be aware that world is fast pace of world changing requires adolescence to adapt themselves to the new situation. It means that a young individual needs to be more up to date that older ones. Because the young experiences much instability in their lives. To clarify my idea, they need to learn more about new emerging technology to be able to suit a proper career or stabilize their own occupied position. In this case their family cannot help much and they need to make the decisions by themselves which make them to be trained to make better decision.
To conclude, many factors such as education, independency, fast pace of world change can boost young individual’s decision making ability. All in all, I believe that nowadays youngsters make better decision comparing past.
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- Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives.Which viewpoint do you agree with? 76
- TPO-50 Integrated toefl writing 3
- TPO 44 - Integrated Writing Task 80
- TPO 44 - Integrated Writing Task 80
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 41, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a tremendous way" with adverb for "tremendous"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...Decisions affect youngsters' lives in a tremendous way. Young people need to decide about vari...
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Line 3, column 43, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'earlier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: earlier
...rthermore, young adults get independent more earlier than in the past. In pastime, families ...
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Line 3, column 193, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...tly was the financially responsible for all of the family. However, nowadays children when...
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Line 3, column 480, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...f the children to make better decision. To put the idea forward, we should be aw...
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Line 4, column 183, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'need'?
Suggestion: need
...ation. It means that a young individual needs to be more up to date that older ones. ...
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Line 4, column 228, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... to be more up to date that older ones. Because the young experiences much instability ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, furthermore, however, if, so, then, well, kind of, such as, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2155.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 417.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16786570743 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8738183282 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549160671463 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 682.2 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.3455078045 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.7916666667 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.375 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.58333333333 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.433392275897 0.236089414692 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116720085548 0.076458572812 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0964785792914 0.0737576698707 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.242757220281 0.150856017488 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.1043658638 0.0645574589148 162% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.41 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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