Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
By developing media such as TV, Internet and other broadcasting tools, people of all around the world can access to the latest news easily. Although some of the people believe that globe’s issues doesn’t related to them, I think that everybody should pay attention and care about events happening around the world. It doesn’t matter these events are bitter or pleasant, we should be aware of them. I support my fact by providing three reasons. First, maybe we can help other people to solve their problem. In addition, perhaps these events happens to us. So, we can prepare ourselves to cope them. Finally, we can determine the reasons of these events and plan to prevent them or modify their affection. The detailed description is presented in following sections.
First, when an event, whether pleasant or unpleasant, happen to the others, it can has a direct or indirect impact in our life. If it has direct effect of our life, we should take some actions to pass the situation. If it doesn’t has a direct effect, we can help others to overcome it. In total, before everything we should know that something happened around the world. Then, we can take action and help them. For instance, we had flood last year in our city. Everything was ruined. The cities facilities were completely destroyed. Even we didn’t access to water for drink. After a while, national and international team provided us food and drink water. People from all over the world financed us to repair our houses. This year, the News told that one of the cities in Haiti is destroyed by an intensive earthquake. Based on similar experience, our people send them food, blankets and water as well as financial aids. Thus, knowing about what is happening around the world can give us a perspective to help each other.
In addition, by knowing what happens in other regions, we can prevent unpleasant events or modify their effect whether controllable or uncontrollable. For example, when a huge earthquake happened in Kobe in Japan, our government started to rehabilitate and strengthen the building. They pass new laws and defined new standards which oblige construction companies to build heavy duty structures. Therefore, knowing is cause awareness, consequently, help to decide immediate actions in similar situations.
Last but not least, being aware of what happen around the world may help us to be deeper in the reasons and factors of causing a certain event. This help us to plan and facilitate us to prevent such bitter events. For example, two train crushed on France last year. Many of passenger were died. Our train transportation companies were looking for the reason of the event. After a while, newspapers wrote the automated navigation system didn’t act efficiently and made a big mistake. This system was employed in our trains too. Thus, our managers fix the bugs of system and in some cases used an alternative system. Furthermore, they planned to improve system periodically. So, if our train company managers didn’t eager to know about such unpleasant news, they couldn’t fix the system and save the life of passengers from probable dangers.
In conclusion, we should take care of us and world by knowing what is happening around it. Being easygoing indicate our irresponsibility. We all are responsible to our society and each other. We should know that these unlikely events may happen to us.
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- T P O-48 - Integrated Writing Task 87
- TPO 33 80
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 150, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ess to the latest news easily. Although some of the people believe that globe's issues...
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Line 3, column 84, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...npleasant, happen to the others, it can has a direct or indirect impact in our life...
^^^
Line 6, column 231, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'train' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'trains'.
Suggestion: trains
...nt such bitter events. For example, two train crushed on France last year. Many of pa...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, finally, first, furthermore, if, look, may, so, then, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as well as, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2870.0 1977.66487455 145% => OK
No of words: 567.0 407.700716846 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06172839506 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87972968509 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80721614292 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 278.0 212.727598566 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490299823633 0.524837075471 93% => OK
syllable_count: 873.0 618.680645161 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 25.0 9.59856630824 260% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 41.0 20.6003584229 199% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.1140433587 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.0 100.406767564 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.8292682927 20.6045352989 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.90243902439 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 15.0 4.88709677419 307% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162924342442 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0412719867515 0.076458572812 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0522824162726 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107065354469 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0204176709635 0.0645574589148 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 86.8835125448 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => Gunning_fog is low.
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => The average readability is low. Need to improve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Try to use less pronouns (like 'It, I, They, We, You...') as the subject of a sentence.
Write the essay in 30 minutes. We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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