It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
These days by advent of new technologies and media all news and event spread around the world easily and quickly. Undoubtedly all event have some effect on our lives. However, in this regard some believe that we have to know this news and event, nevertheless, others assert it is n't necessary to know this events. In my opinion, it is better for members of society that to familiar with what is happening around the world, for several different reasons.
First, clearly living in modern world society need to awareness of not only around us but also the world. Because all event will somehow affect in our lives. In fact the main reason is that events in one society will affect another. For example, if the value of oil in the US increases, prices of many other items in ASIAN countries will also raise, actually , the reason for this is the dependence of the economy all around the world. Therefore, in order to live in this new world, people need to know everything.
Second, basically having knowledge about every thing, it is very useful. Experience has shown that communities that made up informed people(**) were much more advanced than other communities. For instance, when I went to school, I tried to learn computer science while I didn't need to it at that time, however I learned it. After I entered to university, my experience in computer science has helped me to understand my lessons better. So, it can be said, that your knowledge may not use today, but definitely someday will be used.
In conclusion, it is necessary for us to know about events happening around in our world. In this regard there are two main reasons, one, we live in modern world, second, increase our knowledge is very useful in our life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 302, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...thers assert it is nt necessary to know this events. In my opinion, it is better for...
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Line 1, column 428, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'several'.
Suggestion: several
...what is happening around the world, for several different reasons. First, clearly living in ...
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Line 5, column 107, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... not only around us but also the world. Because all event will somehow affect in our li...
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Line 5, column 359, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...SIAN countries will also raise, actually , the reason for this is the dependence o...
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Line 9, column 270, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...tried to learn computer science while I didnt need to it at that time, however I lear...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1439.0 1977.66487455 73% => OK
No of words: 302.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76490066225 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48025017018 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.55298013245 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 456.3 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.6164338255 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.9375 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.875 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.625 5.45110844103 177% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261985325922 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0897232180455 0.076458572812 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.073931505953 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160408710018 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0688436593481 0.0645574589148 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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