Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Paying attention to news and events around the world is the daily routine of many people as a member of the global village. some claim that being aware of things surrounded us is enough for one's living. However, I agree that it is of importance to know about events all over the world as much as possible for the following reasons.
first of all, every event may indirectly affect on our living sometime or somewhere even if the effect on the spot is obscure and it is always better to stay informed. The dense interaction among countries nowaday has connected and formed the world as a big community that the consequence of each event may have influence on other happening elsewhere. For instance, if a war occurred in the middle east, the political and economical turmoil would make the oil export from the middle east countries uncertain and decreasing, leading to the oil supply in short and the global price increasing. people from both private and public entities who notice the event first will be able to analyze and predict the situation and take further actions earlier. In other words, whoever being alert to the international affairs has the most opportunities to take advantage of it.
Second, noticing events in other places helps us to learn from others experience and become better prepared. For example, several years ago, an earthquake happened in Japan and resulted in a tremondous tsunami fiercely attacked the nuclear plant and leaded to a serious damage and nuclear radiation leak, making hundreds and thousands of residents exposed to a high risk circumstance. After the events, people all over the world, who have relied on nuclear power for a long time, start to weigh and balance the nuclear policy and put more efforts on finding alternative energy to ensure the safety and sustainable development of human being. This exactly explains the importance of the events that even if it happens remotely and how we can learn a lesson from it.
To conclude, I agree that everyone should keep attention on local and international news since they both will affect us to some degree. keep informed of the global events can expand our horizons of the reality and be prepared in advance. Moreover, all events and experience can inspire us to consider our daily life and keep progress.
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- TOEFL T P O 49 - Integrated Writing Task 68
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- TPO 35 - Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
- TPO 39 - Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Some
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Suggestion: one's
...e of things surrounded us is enough for ones living. However, I agree that it is of ...
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Suggestion: First
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Suggestion: effect
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Suggestion: People
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...sider our daily life and keep progress.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, for example, for instance, in short, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1923.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 390.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93076923077 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58211748445 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561538461538 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 612.0 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.7422240717 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.2 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.46666666667 5.45110844103 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186834091034 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0649443218677 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0559469079617 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120462578967 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0523860046871 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.18 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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