Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Most advertisements make products look better than they really are.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Most advertisements make products look better than they really are.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Submitted by Dozer on Mon, 01/29/2018 - 11:13

There are many aspects of a successful business and advertising is one of them since it helps companies to increase their sales. Personally, I think that commercials are misleading oftentimes. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, products often promoted by celebrities whom people tend to believe. When we see that our favorite artists praise new products, we want to try them because we sympathize these individuals and using the same commodities brings us closer to them. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. I have immensely dry skin and always look for new creams that can help me to decrease my irritation. When a while ago, I saw a video on Youtube channel advertising a new lotion I decided to give it a shot and bought a tube. I did not do any extra research or read reviews about the cream prior to the purchase since it was promoted by my favorite actress whom I admired. I was truly disappointed to find out that this cream was not an outstanding one as she stated. Moreover, it had the same content than the majority of available lotions. This example illustrates how advertisements with celebrities can trick the general public.
Secondly, manufacturers hide disadvantages of their goods while advertising them. The main goal of a business is to make a profit and companies do everything they can to increase their sales. In this way, in commercials, they stress benefits of their products but conceal their flaws. For example, a few weeks ago I came down with a cold and had to visit a doctor. On my way to a clinic, I saw a huge banner advertising a new medication to relieve symptoms of the illness such as a runny nose, cough, and fever. The text about advantages of this medicine was in bold and vivid. However, the disadvantages were written in a fine print and on the very bottom of the banner, and so I could barely see them. If had not read about possible side effects of the drug and had taken it, I could have suffered. That is why I think that commercials are deceptive oftentimes.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that advertisements make goods look more beneficial than they really are. This is because famous people take part in them, and because of companies prone to hide flaws of their commodities.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 140, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ur favorite artists praise new products, we want to try them because we sympathiz...
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Line 2, column 930, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
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...isements with celebrities can trick the general public. Secondly, manufacturers hide disadvan...
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Line 4, column 224, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...one to hide flaws of their commodities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, while, for example, i feel, i think, in conclusion, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1910.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 407.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69287469287 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84554830716 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547911547912 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 612.9 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.0316153512 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.0434782609 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6956521739 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.26086956522 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139384244538 0.236089414692 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.038195435128 0.076458572812 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0533948699001 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0892869374586 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0416884843198 0.0645574589148 65% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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