With increasing academic pressure that takes up the time more and more, the free time becomes so valuable and get people’s awareness. Young people begin to calculate the benefit of various activities, and show this close attentiveness to avoid being left behind. Here are three alternatives: to accumulate work experience by a part-time job or volunteering in a community, learning to play a sport , learning to play a musical instrument. From my own perspective, I prefer sport to music and volunteering because of two reasons below.
It is too obvious to say that sports increase physical healthy and alertness., while it also makes sense to say the sports increase mental alertness. Since sports plays happen fast, and athletes develop the skill needed to make effective snap decisions. Whether it’s a basketball player deciding to shoot or a soccer player realizing his best move is to pass to a teammate for the assist, athletes learn critical decision-making skills that will benefit them both during and after game time. Besides, Physical activity naturally increases blood flow to the brain and activates endorphins which makes you happy as much as playing music.
In addition, sports allow a young to build positive social relationships when group sports activities are incorporated into his or her life. Team sports provide athletes with a natural community which is comparable to volunteering or doing part-time job, and even beyond these for it is a more supportive and easy environment. The players are encouraged to express their concerns, hopes, and disappointments to their coaches and their teammates and seek feedback in return, which bolster their communication skills; but also help them become more adaptable, patient, and responsible when they are pursuing the same goal. I remembered the football clubs in middle school. As a girl who was too shy to talk, I was pretty amazed at first to find I did quite well in playing football, for all I did was to run quick enough and shoot. Playing football captivated me deeply, but discovered in order to perform better, I had to cooperate with others, which included to have a word with others. Thanks for the encouragement from coach and the friendly attitudes of most of my mates, once I overcame and start to establish the first talk, the diverse pairing of personalities and scenarios taught me the meaning of communication. I even encountered my best friend in the team. She definitely was my alter ego, being so stubborn and cocky to chat with the rest. And it turned out that both of us learnt and foster our communication skills and attain the positive social relationships also beyond our team.
Last but not least, sports are so much more than playing simply for fun and exercise, or developing useful skills. instead it is about the sporting spirit which is unreplaceable among the other two choices. Many of the sports practiced nowadays are competitive. You play to win, and the game has little meaning unless you do your utmost to win it. As soon as the question of prestige arises, the most tough instincts are aroused to make consistent and difficult decisions under high pressure. This ability that function under tension translates to person who may be more willing to persist and capable of tackling the next big problem in the future. I believed that’s why so many famous entrepreneurs are inclined to spend the little free time after busy engaging to do sports. Just as the athlete is working out themselves on the green field to triumph, the head of the company is striving to prevail in that business field , and so is the student making the deadlines and chasing academic accomplishment. By the way, G.P.A outcome of the players in our football team far exceed the average when graduated.
In a net shell, I strongly suggest you take sports as free-time activities for you can acquire mentally pleasant and consciousness as music do, realize a positive relationship as volunteering do and earn the spirit particularly belongs to sports.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, may, so, well, while, as to, in addition, by the way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 38.0 13.8261648746 275% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 85.0 52.1666666667 163% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3383.0 1977.66487455 171% => OK
No of words: 670.0 407.700716846 164% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04925373134 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.08766726615 4.48103885553 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88338910564 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 374.0 212.727598566 176% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558208955224 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 1034.1 618.680645161 167% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 11.0 1.86738351254 589% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.0897215711 48.9658058833 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.821428571 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9285714286 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.96428571429 5.45110844103 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 11.8709677419 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154300524346 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0396202416837 0.076458572812 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0408982748914 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0922450764427 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0276046283508 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 173.0 86.8835125448 199% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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