Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends.
Teachers are the beacon of knowledge in life and the friends are the secrect keepers. Both of them play significant roles in the life of a person. The statement here posits that the teachers have more influence on the students than friends. I disagree with this statement and I am going to explain my reasonings in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, outside of home, the students spend lion's share of their time with their friends. They play together, share leisure activities and what not. Even sometimes, they stay overnight at their friends' house. This prolonged exposure to the friends has significant influnece over them. It is common to see that a group of friends share the common traits. A person is deeply influence by the persons he is exposed to. So, say for example, if someone does not have a particular trait, or habit of doing something that his friends do, he will began to try and learn or acquire that habit to gain more acceptance among his friends. This can be good sometimes but also has the potential to be a disastrous situation. For instance, one of my cousin is a compelling example of this. He was very obidient to his parents and teachers. But, in high school he got tangled with a group of friends who took drugs. Although, my cousin never did drugs before, he started taking drugs to get along with his friends. It was a horrible experience for him and his family. This is how strong the influnece of friends is on the students.
Moreover, the students and their firends are of the same age or near about the same age. They feel more comfortable to interact with them rather than the teachers. In addition, most of the cases teachers are viewed as a person of respect, so students usually don't go to them unless it is absolutely necessary and most of the time just to solve their problem with study. in contrast, the students share their personal life and their secrets with their firends which they can't tell anyone else. Sometimes, the friends know more about a person than his family members. Thus the bonding between the friends are strong and can influence a person more strongly. For instance, one of my friend was having trouble in his personal life and he could not tell those to anyone. But than he shared the problem with us and he was going to take detrimental steps in his life. But, me and my friends intervened and persuaded him to change his mind. Even his parents did not know about this incident. It is another example, why the friends have more influnece.
In conclusion, it is true that teachers can guide us with their wisdom and influnecne our personality but the influence of the friends are greater. With the arguments presented before, I stand by my position that students are more influenced by their friends than their teachers.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'begin'
Suggestion: begin
... something that his friends do, he will began to try and learn or acquire that habit ...
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Line 5, column 556, Rule ID: TRY_AND[1]
Message: "Try and" is common in colloquial speech, but "'try to'" is recommended for writing.
Suggestion: try to
...g that his friends do, he will began to try and learn or acquire that habit to gain mor...
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Line 5, column 938, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'drug'
Suggestion: drug
...ok drugs. Although, my cousin never did drugs before, he started taking drugs to get ...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... person of respect, so students usually dont go to them unless it is absolutely nece...
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Message: Use simply 'necessary'.
Suggestion: necessary
...ts usually dont go to them unless it is absolutely necessary and most of the time just to solve thei...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
...just to solve their problem with study. in contrast, the students share their pers...
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Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...r secrets with their firends which they cant tell anyone else. Sometimes, the friend...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...about a person than his family members. Thus the bonding between the friends are str...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, thus, even so, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, it is true, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2314.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 492.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70325203252 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70967865282 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48382299969 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.461382113821 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 694.8 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.9233618247 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.6451612903 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8709677419 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.41935483871 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 23.0 11.8709677419 194% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.337654720087 0.236089414692 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0875989535937 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10850946261 0.0737576698707 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.265561696175 0.150856017488 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0757380490669 0.0645574589148 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 11.7677419355 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.68 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.11 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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