Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Television advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Television advertising didn’t fail to rule any age group ranging from children to old aged people. But television especially advertise for any necessities, goods, food, clothes, toys and never ending list of necessities has done more harm then good to mind set of young children. Tender growing brain of kids is cultivated by surrounding environment. If they are brought up under the bad influence of attractive television advertising, then they can turn out to be couch potato or monster in future. Elaborating my perspective that television advertising should not ne allowed to young ones as follows:
Children of this age group have tendency to imitate what they see. Nowadays couple of reality shows advertisement represents different gymnastic positions, which are catastrophic to fragile growing muscles and bones. Many children want to copy positions out of curiosity can result in strain of muscles or even broken bones. Furthermore attractive advertising of clothes stands at peak to ruin children’s mind-set. Parents are the worst sufferers for colorful and different patterns of clothes advertisement, as they are forced to fulfill their kid’s wish to buy innumerable clothes without necessity.
Culprit is advertisement of toys in changing behavior of kids; they may be reckless and arrogant if their wishes are unheard. So, fascinating toys commercial did great job in burning out savings of young one’s parents. On the other hand sometime toys are proved to cause negative effect on health. For instance Fidget spinners were banned in United States because they emit radiating, which can damage human body Children are naïve to decide how much and what they need.
Advertising food products and hiding bad ingredient which are used to prepare that plays a role a monster in life of children. Food products for instance fried chips, chocolates, burgers, and other fast food, eating on regular basis can lead to obesity at young age. Since obesity invites other diseases such as cardiac disorders, diabetes and high blood pressure considered bad for wellbeing.
In a nutshell, it is proved that parents should restrict kids to see television advertisement for above negative effects on brain, behavior and body structure.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'than'?
Suggestion: than
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Furthermore,
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... pressure considered bad for wellbeing. In a nutshell, it is proved that parents...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, may, so, then, well, for instance, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 43.0788530466 35% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1914.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 353.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.42209631728 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90982974026 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.623229461756 0.524837075471 119% => OK
syllable_count: 589.5 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.415379921 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.588235294 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7647058824 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.88235294118 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 11.8709677419 17% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 3.85842293907 337% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175990768238 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0571368535927 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0526354381284 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0991529504387 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0557945431827 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 10.9000537634 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.28 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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