The popularity is an important factor which attract many of people to one's and affect them. Thus, the prominant individuals always are traced by people and their opinions are very effective on the people's treatments and thoughts. I strongly believe that the younger people are influenced by celebrities' views more than the older people. In the following paragraph, I will discuss my perspective using some reasons and examples.
I think the young individuals because of their youthful and having a wide range of desires always are affected more than the elders by famous people views. Young people want to reach a high level of success and prominent entertainers and athletes, as a suitable role model, can help them to find their fondnesses. In addition, their views can be a strong motivation for youngs to have a great attempts to get their achievements. For example, my brother is a fan of a famous singer and always tries to imitate this actor's treatments. he believes that this singer's opinions are as a torch that can light his route to the success and renown.
Moreover, the young people have a strong body than the old people, and so they can trace the prominent opinions and perspectives easier that the old ones. That is, youthful energy is a main parameter that help the young people to do the ideas and views of the wellknown individuals to achieve the successfulness. For instance, two years ago my friend saw a TV program and decide to go to the summit of a high mountain with his father, but because his father was old and could not to accompany him. Therefore, my friend went to the mountain's summit alone.
To sum up, I believe young people because of their youthful energe and vividness have a strong incentive to imitate the prominent persons and liston their opinions.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'are'.
Suggestion: are always
...t them. Thus, the prominant individuals always are traced by people and their opinions are...
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Message: This phrase is probably grammatically incorrect. Write 'help them find' instead.
Suggestion: help them find
...athletes, as a suitable role model, can help them to find their fondnesses. In addition, their vi...
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...mous singer and always tries to imitate this actors treatments. he believes that thi...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
...ries to imitate this actors treatments. he believes that this singers opinions are...
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...his actors treatments. he believes that this singers opinions are as a torch that ca...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'mountains'' or 'mountain's'?
Suggestion: mountains'; mountain's
...y him. Therefore, my friend went to the mountains summit alone. To sum up, I believe you...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1487.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 308.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82792207792 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6695242725 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.532467532468 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 456.3 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.2594610259 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.214285714 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.14285714286 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164601061793 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0611422326197 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0545746699434 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10075194845 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0661518311358 0.0645574589148 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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