It's a highly debated issue whether The opinions of celebrities are more important to younger people than they are to older people and this topic can be approached from several angles due to its complexity. In my side of view, I totally agree that The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people because of the reasons that discussing below.
First and foremost, older people have great experiences and not easily affected by any opinion because they already have sufficient self-confidence. While young people do not have the same experiences, they are always trying to listen to someone they like, like their favorable actor or athletes to follow them. For example, if a famous athlete made advertising related to new sports equipment, Younger people would directly go to purchase it. Although older people might like it also, they knew that they would not benefit from it. Consequently, the opinion of celebrities is more important to younger people because they still building up their life experiences.
Another exquisite point to be mentioned here is that the younger people always like to mimic celebrities because they are still struggling to find what carrier or sports, and the list goes on; they prefer to choose for their future.
On the top of that, a lot of young people think about getting a lot of money to build up their future as the best as they can, so they follow and mimic the opinion of their ideals. For example, if a famous instructor mentions a specific kind of sport, a lot of the young people would follow him blindly. To sum it up, younger people affect the opinions of celebrities they like due to the fact that those people still trying to figuring out their future outlines.
Due to the aforementioned reasons, I firmly agree that the opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, if, so, still, while, for example, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1658.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 337.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91988130564 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66272488506 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 212.727598566 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.46884272997 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 522.0 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 41.8339143386 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.166666667 100.406767564 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0833333333 20.6045352989 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.370155660746 0.236089414692 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.173573645048 0.076458572812 227% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.13608739031 0.0737576698707 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.263779849417 0.150856017488 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.153160975698 0.0645574589148 237% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 11.7677419355 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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