There is no doubt that nowadays, celebrities attitudes have left a profound effect on people's perspective. No one can deny the direct and indirect impact of their manner on the societies' thoughts. Some people may hold the view that these well-known persons could be more impressive for younger people rather than the older once. However, some others may look at this concept through a different lens. I am of the opinion that this contention is thoroughly accurate. In the subsequent paragraphs, I will delve to the most outstanding reason, which will aptly elucidate my idea.
First and foremost, without a shadow of doubt, the younger people are concerned with choosing their life approaches; therefore, they seek to find brilliant heroes for their lives. By considering this fact, the youths virtually tend to persuade the celebrities avenue who successfully could culminate their dreams. Moreover, from the psychological perspective, the younger people possess an upper-level tendency to prosperity in comparison with the older persons. As a result, they would put these renowned people for their manners' template.
Another reason which deserves some point here is that the adult people mostly incline to themselves for their decisions. In other words, they prefer to rely on their own in daily activities. To be more specific, older individuals feel that they already have enough knowledge, which makes them a needless person. On the other hand, the youths feel lacking in this term, and thus, they are stimulated to follow someone famous, such as entertainer or athlete. Furthermore, the research has been proved that the better a person pick out own influencers, the more efficiently he can convert his targets into reality.
To put it briefly, from what has been discussed above, we may safely reach the conclusion that the enthusiasm for following the celebrities thoughts have been viewed much more within the younger people as long as in their ages, they are looking for some champions for their dreams routes to guide them. Consequently, it is highly recommended that the youths should choose their influencer more ingeniously since they will leave an immense affection on their upcoming attitudes.
- TPO 43- integrated writing 86
- TPO 49 - Integrated writing 80
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 81
- TPO 21 - Integrated TOEFL essay 83
- TPO 41 - integrated writing 81
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 248, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'celebrities'' or 'celebrity's'?
Suggestion: celebrities'; celebrity's
...e youths virtually tend to persuade the celebrities avenue who successfully could culminate...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
briefly, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, no doubt, such as, as a result, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1861.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 353.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27195467422 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74870756359 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.611898016997 0.524837075471 117% => OK
syllable_count: 556.2 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.4286848152 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.470588235 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7647058824 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.94117647059 5.45110844103 182% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170609269918 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.054528549145 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0426449889441 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107590136982 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0201348725881 0.0645574589148 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.37 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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