Do you agree or disagree？ It is better to relax by watching a movie or reading a book than doing physical exercise. Explain your answer with examples and specific reasons.
In today's fast-paced world, vicissitudes of life exert pressure on people in an unprecedented manner. People strive for finding a way out. In order to achieve equanimity, people read books, watch movies or do physical exercise. In my humble opinion, watching films or reading books lead to more relaxation than doing physical exercise. There are two main reasons that buttress my point of view. Firstly, books and films make us forget about the anxiety that we have to contend with day-to-day problems. Secondly, physical exercise leads to drainage of energy and does not help with mental satisfaction.
Books and films as any other art form offer a way out. They make people feel, experience and forget about the hardships of life. Even if the joy is ephemeral, it makes people feel relaxed. Most people cannot carry on without having a book by their bedside or a theater around the corner. They just do not realize it because they are so intermingled with our life that we cannot distinguish them from it. To illustrate, there existed a period in my life where I was under extreme pressure. One day I watched a movie which gave me hope. My main motivation for not giving up stemmed from that movie. Eventually, I was able to come out of the ordeal and move on.
Working out is an agitating activity. It leads to drainage of energy. By working out, a person is continuously becoming more exhausted. However, I do not deny that working out leads to a healthier life, nor am I denying the fact that people will probably feel more relaxed after doing physical exercise, but we have to note that the calmness generated by doing physical training is a result and not an immediate effect of working out. In other words, during a gym session, one does not feel more relaxed, chances are that he is more nervous rather than relaxed. It is only a few hours after a gym session that a person feels healthier and relieved. I do not think that there is anyone in the world who regards the act of working out as a calming activity.
In conclusion, I firmly believe that movies and books make us feel more appeased. These are art forms that show us an escape from the banality in life. While physical exercise make us feel healthier and excited, it does not make us feel calm.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in an unprecedented manner" with adverb for "unprecedented"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...itudes of life exert pressure on people in an unprecedented manner. People strive for finding a way out. I...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, while, in conclusion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1880.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 402.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67661691542 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51872642862 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52736318408 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 601.2 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.4379803929 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.3076923077 100.406767564 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.4615384615 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.53846153846 5.45110844103 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195076355415 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0518285352241 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0869264145579 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123803206686 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0835588458059 0.0645574589148 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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