Do you agree or disagree that people should sometimes do things they do not enjoy doing. Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
Carol Dweck, an american psychologist, has studied types of mindset. She categorized people as fixed-mindset or growth-mindset. Those with fixed mindset usually dislike challenges, which can harm them. Because they only enjoy doing what they already know, people with fixed mindset seem to be limited. People should do things they do not enjoy doing because it will help them get out of their comfort zone, and it will expose them to new learning experiences.
First, trying out different things helps people to avoid their comfort zones. Some people restrict their capacities to thing they believe they are great at, ignoring that they are able to perform well in other fields. For instance, one of my friend called Jenny used to think that she could not sing just because when she grew up, she only develop her dancing skills. However, at a students' party at my school, she was asked to dance, and she outperformed the other dancers. That day Jenny learned that she was able to dance well, for she tried to dance. Trying other hobbies is an effective in which people discover their aptitudes.
Second, things people do not enjoy can be an opportunity to learn. Most successful people succeed because they are opened to learn whenever the opportunity is present. Sticking on what one enjoys is detrimental to him or herself because it impedes the opportunity for growth. Doing things that we do not enjoy can create many opportunities in our lives. For example, a friend of mine called Mulengetsi disliked cars in the past. Nevertheless, he learned how to drive. Currently, he works as a chauffeur as he is in holiday. Being opened to try things that we fear is a helpful aspect in life.
In conclusion, trying new hobbies, passtimes or anyother activity benefits people. They discover their full potential, and they learn new skills. Jenny became aware of her ability to dance when she performed dancing in front of a big audience though she initially thought she could not be able. Mulengetsi's openess to learn to drive helped him find an occupation for his holidays.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, nevertheless, second, so, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1730.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 350.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94285714286 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59949131602 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.554285714286 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 521.1 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.7209000652 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.2173913043 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2173913043 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213282706502 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0655979288506 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0962289367185 0.0737576698707 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133258226696 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0887397061217 0.0645574589148 137% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.78 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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