Do you agree or disagree? Student activities do as much benefit as academic
study.
Roles of students activities have been an appealing topic. Numerous students over the world state that benefit of student activities is as important as academic study. Personally, I am convinced by this statement due to the following reasons.
On one hand, what draws much of my attention is academic performance improvement. It cannot be denied that student activities create a chance for students to apply their studied knowledge in real situation and condition and review their knowledge through working. Therefore, students stand a golden chance to know what is their strength and what is their weakness. Consequently, students are sure to adjust their study ways to make amends for weakness and find some methods that maximize their study efficiency. As a result, there is a possibility that students improve their study efficiency. More over, there is a chance that students exchange knowledge with others when they taking part in events of students. Hence, students are certain to meet other friends with different majors and have different persepective. As a consequent, they are capable to gain knowledge in different majors and different levels. Accordingly, students are bound to broaden their background and enhance their knowledge of their majors. Thus, involving in events of students encourages students to study better. With no doubt, students' study performance is improved by involving in students activities
On the other hand, it is claimed that participating in activities for students takes students a lot of time and forces students do a lot of work. Therefore, amount of studying time of students are likely to be decreased by these activities, which account for unconcentration of students on studying. Consequently, study performance of students who take part in student activities are probably to be degraded and there is a chance that their future wil become worse. However, it is unecessarily the case. In fact, only by taking part in student activities, students are capable to keep away from thinking about their schooling things. Hence, they are able to refresh their mind and have a short break, which encourage them to enjoy life better. As a result, students are certain to more concentrate on studying. Because students spend an considerable amount of time on these activities and they have their own personal jobs to finish like their study, hence, participating in students activities not only brings the concentration on studying for students but also improves student' time management skill. Thus, it is good for students' future and supports them in numerous of daily life and study sittuations. Accordingly, there is a likelihood that students have better future when they involve in student activities. By and large, joining in these activities, students are sure to have better future.
All in all, study improvement and self development are the convincing reasons for my agreement. It is highly recommended that people should carefully consider my writing before making the right decision on roles of student activities.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 835, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...ate on studying. Because students spend an considerable amount of time on these ac...
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Line 4, column 235, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ecision on roles of student activities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, consequently, hence, however, if, so, therefore, thus, in fact, no doubt, as a result, by and large, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2582.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 484.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3347107438 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69041575982 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91183074397 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.45041322314 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 802.8 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.9212800096 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.3076923077 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6153846154 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.46153846154 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206871126172 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0671600600747 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.05992121121 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129082938935 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0645095548272 0.0645574589148 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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