I am afraid I have to disagree with the statement that we should disallow television advertisement directed to the youth. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will illuminate in the following essay.
First of all, the advertisement directed toward the baby would not directly exert negative affection on them. To begin with, children in such a life stage(Between two to five) cannot understand exterior information as we expected due to their immature brain and deficiency of social experience. In fact, babies will not concentrate on the advertising content itself even though they seem like they are staring at the television. Therefore, I think those advertisements are harmless to our young kids. Besides, babies cannot make any purchase since they do not have a bank account or cash. As a result, those advertisements are majorly watched and absorbed by their parents who has already built a complicated system to differentiate commercial deceptions from regular needs. Consequently, I sincerely doubt that sort of advertising could cause economic loss to a family.
Secondly, this kind of advertisement is a sign of the uprising of a potential market, which could actually benefit our young citizens. I would like to start with a comparison. There were so many citizens dying in a very young age in the past, as a result of poverty of living materials. They could not obtain necessary nutrients, vitamins or stuff could support them to pass through the vulnerable stage. However, nowadays, with the development of science, we increasingly possess an ability to design a relatively easy way to grow up healthily. The commercial toward young kids is one of the most important signs of this change. Therefore, I consider that, far from banning the advertisement directed to kids, the government should encourage companies to invest more money in this industry.
In conclusion, I strongly believe the government should allow companies to put baby-oriented advertisements into television. This is because the sort of commercial cannot directly cause negative influence; and because the uprising of "baby" industry is absolutely beneficial to our young citizens.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, besides, consequently, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, i feel, i think, in conclusion, in fact, kind of, sort of, as a result, first of all, i am afraid, to begin with, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1839.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 345.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33043478261 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16037214753 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.594202898551 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 582.3 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.5024612454 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.166666667 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1666666667 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.8333333333 5.45110844103 217% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245257764921 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0686080217256 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0645277823572 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143963139012 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0199617657111 0.0645574589148 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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