parents always wants to see their children to become successful in life. They helps them in different ways they provide them food education and financial support. some people encourage their children to take part-time-job, while other have opposite views. In my views, parent should not encourage children to take part-time-job. The reasons are follows.
The very first reason for my propensity is, taking part-time-job will hurt their studies. When children get involves in jobs they are not enough mature to manage their time for studies and for the job. When they earn some money from the job their interest in studies become less. and they start working more hours to earn more money.for instance in during my high schools one of the my friend who was financially weak his parents allowed him to take part time job when he started job at convenience store for few hours, after few days he disappear from the school because of the job hours he could not managed the schedule result in he got lower grade in class.Also job is always stressful part of life either part-time or full time stress in early age effect children,s learning abilities.
Secondly, Taking part-time job have negative effect on children health both physically and mentally. some jobs required physical woks which make them tired. When children become tired they can,t concentrate on studies well. Also when children do some mental work in office they become stressed.Physical works effect their growth as well. if parents want to see their children successful in life they can provides better opportunities for education and better food which makes them more strong than early job which damage their mental and physical capabilities.
To sum it up, although part time job child may earn some amount of money, but its have negative consequences on children studies and also its bad effect on health physically as well as mentally which suppress there capabilities which are necessary for successful life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, while, for instance, as well as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1662.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 325.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11384615385 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59649285536 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.547692307692 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 499.5 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.59856630824 10% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 119.47924041 48.9658058833 244% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 110.8 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6666666667 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.53333333333 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 37.0 5.5376344086 668% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.384536302542 0.236089414692 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.151776651464 0.076458572812 199% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0812708495914 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.254336631482 0.150856017488 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0959382157327 0.0645574589148 149% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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