do you prefer to give money for which type of activity:
providing food and house for poor people
giving money to poor people for starting the small business
medical care
The question is whether people should donate a part of their money for organizations which supply house and food for poor humans or give human beings money to start their own business and or provide medical care for people in need. Everyone with regard to his perspective can maintain a specific direction toward this statement. Some believe that starting small businesses allows poor people to earn money and also it would be beneficial for community while others have a conviction that spending money on medical treatments and or providing food and shelter can be more effective. I am unanimous with the first group; so the next paragraphs will vastly elucidate my vantage point through three salient reasons:
To begin with, one should not forget that the main purpose of charity is that we can make poor people hopeful to life. If we give them money in any opportunity, as a matter a fact, they will become lazy people and it goes without saying that habit is another kind of suicide; hence, there must be a strong solution. As the old saying goes in my country" instead of giving a fish to a person every day , you can teach him fishing ". Supporting the poor beings to establish their own business will cause them to have stable income monthly, on the other hand, their personality can reinforce in this way through improving self-confidence. In short, creating small businesses can guarantees a poor persons' life forever and he will never wait for others' hands.
In addition, the mentioned approach can cover whole of society. It has been believed that nowadays, communities are struggling with unemployment problems; therefore, the governments fail to optimize their economic. Donating money to the young entrepreneurs can be a stepping stone in solving economic crises. For instance, a country with having a huge number of small but effective businesses will be able to increase the amount of exporting and importing and boost the quality of life for people. Meanwhile, one should notice that removing unemployment troubles can rescue the youths from drug addiction and other negative activities.
Moreover, when a poor man achieves wealth through these types of organizations, he will make a decision to compensate this favor in the same way; subsequently, he will participate in the mentioned activities and spend money for other poor persons; as a result, this cycle continues and at the end of the poverty will be eradicated.
To sum up, this conclusion could be drawn that giving money for starting small businesses provides more merits in the world such as improving quality of economic, eliminating unemployment and boosting confidence among poor humans.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 406, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...d of giving a fish to a person every day , you can teach him fishing '. Suppo...
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Line 3, column 705, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
... small businesses can guarantees a poor persons life forever and he will never wait for...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, moreover, so, therefore, while, for instance, in addition, in short, kind of, such as, as a result, to begin with, to sum up, with regard to, in the same way, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 9.8082437276 245% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2254.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 440.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12272727273 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79326240785 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577272727273 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 695.7 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.5091291763 48.9658058833 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.266666667 100.406767564 150% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.3333333333 20.6045352989 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.6666666667 5.45110844103 251% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.341231772594 0.236089414692 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111719676651 0.076458572812 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.127308682107 0.0737576698707 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205332890486 0.150856017488 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104855101295 0.0645574589148 162% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 11.7677419355 148% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.01 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.