Nowadays, many countries are dealing with economic crisis which the governments try to handle the crisis by changing budgets in each area hoping to finish the economic condition in the shortest time. One of the controversial topics in these situations is that government should cut budgets in which field: education, health care, or support for the unemployed? In my point of view, cutting the budget of education cannot produce detrimental effects in a short time, hence, seemingly it is the best option among these three suggestions. My statement will be substantiated by the following paragraphs.
To begin with, during economic crises many people experience financial problems, hence, they cannot eat nutritive food adequately. Hence, the rate of sickness is increased among people. In addition, due to the financial problems, the number of people suffered from depression and mental disorders will increase, as well. In this situation, the government must carefully see the bad consequences of economic condition on health of people and plan for managing it. Therefore, cutting budget of health care system is not possible at all.
Secondly, the rate of unemployment is strongly related to the economic condition of a society. The more unemployment rate is, the low prosperity in economy is. Thus, the first goal of governments must be reducing the rate of unemployment so as to manage the economic condition in a shorter time. It is noteworthy mentioning that in such situations which the number of unemployed persons drastically increases, many of them, particularly young people, immigrate to the other countries to find a job which it makes the economic condition worse than previous due to missing young people. In this regard, cutting budget from this section is the worst decision, in my opinion.
Finally, it is universally accepted that educational system in each country is the basis for countries. An effect educational system can play a pivot role in thriving of the society. However, it is believed that effects of educational systems are seen after at least 10 years. Therefore, in economic crises, educational system can be considered as a potential candidate to cut its budget. Although cutting budget of educational system can be reduced the pace of advancement, it does not affect everyday life of people.
Due to the aforementioned ground, I firmly believe that cutting budget of educational system during economic crises is less harmful in comparison with cutting budgets from health care or support of unemployment rate.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 239, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, as to, at least, in addition, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2156.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 405.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32345679012 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95959273347 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508641975309 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 676.8 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.5849589737 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.8 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.25 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.95 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188198267212 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0566777564766 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0671535705935 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112172381499 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0677799477043 0.0645574589148 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
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Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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