There is a controversial debate about the benefits of new technological devices on the education of our children. Some groups of parents hold the view that cell phone have a negative impact on children. Other groups of parents opposes this view and believe that that they are beneficial. In my vantage point, I am more inclined with the letter groups for a variety of reason.
First, new technological device provide children with different tools to learn. Although computers might cause some distraction for children, they are by no means harmful. In fact, there are so many programs that are available to help children to learn. For instance, children can learn vocabulary, science, and math. With the use of different animation and characters, children learn while they are playing. Toddlers may count the number of rabbits in a cage and write the total number in a column next to the picture. Thus, computers are a valuable devices for learning.
Second, educating children using the computers help them communicate with others of the same age. In the past such device were not available, therefore, it was not possible for children to communicate. However, nowadays, they make children closer to each other. The only way of communication was though letters, which takes a long time to each to the receiver. Nowadays, children may contact others from a different countries who speaks different language and have different culture. Such communication helps children to learn more about different values . Therefore, it encourages children to socialize.
Although the aforementioned reason are the first to cross my mind at a glance, they are by no mean the only reason available. In fact, these a further subtle reason, which is a study that was published in the academic.The study was done on one hundred and twenty students in the 5th grade where students were divided into two arms. An arm where children use computers to learn. While the second arm, children learn without the use of computers. Astonishingly, the study shows that students who use the computers for learning are better achievers and got higher grades at school. Thus, this study make us conclude that computers not only help children to learn better, but also achieve higher grades.
To wrap up, contemplating the aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes that cell phones and technological devices has helped a lot our students. If these devices were not available, our children would have faces difficulties in the leaning process.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, thus, while, for instance, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2117.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1887254902 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81190602228 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514705882353 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 651.6 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.0836944132 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.4230769231 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6923076923 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.57692307692 5.45110844103 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152277076522 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0489267097234 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0287531406378 0.0737576698707 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0900428853523 0.150856017488 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0323827605665 0.0645574589148 50% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.