For a child, a family is everything. In our early life, our family teaches us a lot of things such as social values, rules and regulations, cultures, rights and wrongs and so on. Some people think that an extended family is more important, others think that the extended family is less important now than it was in the past. But, in my opinion, an extended family such as living with grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles are more important now than it was in the past.
First of all, older members like grandparents or aunts and uncles are an important member of our society who can teach us a lot of things. For the young generation like us, it is hard to understand the customs and values of our society. As olders knows all those things, they can easily teach us those customs. For instance, I live with my grandparents who was very backdated but knows a lot. At my teenage time, I had an issue of respecting others. For this reason, nobody loved me at my school. I was really depressed at that time. So, I shared with my grandfather. At first, he was really annoyed by this kind of behaviour. But, later he taught me a lot about how to respect others. In my later life, it helped me a lot.
Secondly, living with an extended family teaches us how to compromise. people who live with their grandparents, cousins, aunts, uncles, are more likely to compromise to others. Besides, they know, how to cope with any kinds of situation. For example, one of my friends lives with an extended family. For this reason, he knows how to share and care for others. As he lives with his cousins and uncles, aunts, he is open with other and easily mix with any kinds of people. In festivals like Eids, they share gifts and clothes. So, this kind of family helps them a lot to socialize with others.
In conclusion, though small family is good in some ways, extended family is important now more than it was in the past as our society is getting more complex nowadays. So, in order to learn things like what is right or wrong, we need to live with those older people.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 72, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: People
...ed family teaches us how to compromise. people who live with their grandparents, cousi...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, if, really, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, such as, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1695.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 377.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.49602122016 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43724290124 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.453580901857 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 521.1 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.178851438 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 67.8 100.406767564 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.08 20.6045352989 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.68 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274312106786 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0809471492047 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.14453486407 0.0737576698707 196% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.229711680002 0.150856017488 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.1881359123 0.0645574589148 291% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.3 11.7677419355 62% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.23 10.9000537634 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.73 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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