extended family is less important now than it was in the past - sohrab

We are living in the world where we want to have freedom in most aspects of the life. The extended family which once had its strong root in the past is slowly slowly giving up the space for the new culture. Extended family has got lots of benefits nonetheless It has lost its importance today than it was in the past with people's busy schedules, migrating to new location to pursue work.

To begin with, these days people give the most importance for their privacy, people like to take their independent uninterrupted decisions. Which is not possible in staying with extended family as in extended family elders are more likely to take the important decisions. The most people are willingly abandoning extended family just to have privacy and independence. For instance these days just married couple like to lead their life independently in separate home rather than staying with their in laws house. This will gradually cause extended family to disappear and loose importance.

Second reason why extended family are loosing importance is that most of us are migrating from one location to other location based jobs requirements. In such situation, extended family more like to unsustainable with this locomotion.
Now it is necessary to do job in the city to in order to take care of the family. Most of the time job location wont be the same as the place where they born and brought up. These relocation is one such major reason for lessing the importance of extended family. People have busy scheduled jobs, these jobs made them to spend little time on families and we hardly get some time to talk to our parents, grand parents.

last but not the least, majority of us want to concentrate on studies and our future carriers. We think about our next competition exam. We don't any specific dedicated time for our family members in busy scheduled tim table. We are living in world where we do not spend quality of time together with family members. We contact them virtually through mobiles, app or any other technology. All these impacted extended family to loose importance.

In conclusion, Extended family has got lots lots of benefits however, people's change in attitude, aiming for new desires and advancement in technologies all together causing Extended family less important.

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Average: 6.1 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, nonetheless, second, so, for instance, in conclusion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1931.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 385.0 407.700716846 94% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01558441558 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68213230449 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496103896104 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 627.3 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.2300684916 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.9523809524 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3333333333 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.04761904762 5.45110844103 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 18.0 5.5376344086 325% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.304069141083 0.236089414692 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0912142358345 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0816524565559 0.0737576698707 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161498935198 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0538028267284 0.0645574589148 83% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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