When we travel to another country, the place that we visit is really important. We always would remember that place with something that we saw there. If we have fun we would always talk about that place with great pleasure and if that place would be boring, we try to forget the place and never suggest others to go there. If a foreigner wants to spend one day in my country, I would suggest him to visit Isfahan City for the following reasons.
First and foremost, Isfahan is a historical city which has lots of museum and many interesting historical places to visit. For example, last year I spent one day there which was really great. I spent most of the day to visit museums about people who lived there. It was great that how people’s lives changed through years and how it was affected by their religion and ugh years and how it was affected by their religion and culture. The most important thing that fascinated me was a church. It was a hair in that museum that the king of that time used it to write a letter to his daughter. I was wondered that how they did such a thing with the technology that existed in that time. There all lots of other sclptures, paintings, mosques and monuments that was surprising and I thought they worth visiting at least one time in our lives. I barely like the museums and like to spend time in these places but what I saw in Isfahan was wonderful.
Second, Isfahan has a great environment. It is a really great city which is located near Atlantic ocean. It has great forests that many animals and plants are living there and they are protected and a lot of scientists try to help these creatures from becoming extinct. For instance, while I was in Isfahan I had my lunch in a beutiful spot which was between the beach and the jungle. I felt really tired when I sat there but everything was so great that after spending two hours, I felt energetic and invigorated. I really recommend everyone to visit that place. I really forgot my problems while I was there. Reclining in the beach, listening to the sound of the waves , breathing healthy air and also listen to the sound of the birds and other animals was something that I always thought that are destroyed and it is not easy to find such a raw nature. I recommend everyone to spend at least one hour there and they really understand the meaning of the life and I think it is the best place that a foreigner would find interesting and he would always remember my country with great pleasure.
In sum, I really think that it is really difficult to find a place that all people would find interesting but what I experienced in Isfahan was something that I never would forget. Not only its historical places were wonderful, but also it has such a great nature that everyone would definitely like.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 84, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[10]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put between 'would' and 'remember'.
Suggestion: would always remember
...e that we visit is really important. We always would remember that place with something that we saw t...
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Line 1, column 162, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[3]
Message: Possible agreement error – use past participle here: 'funned'.
Suggestion: funned
...something that we saw there. If we have fun we would always talk about that place w...
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Line 3, column 60, Rule ID: LOTS_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun museum seems to be countable; consider using: 'lots of museums'.
Suggestion: lots of museums
... Isfahan is a historical city which has lots of museum and many interesting historical places ...
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Line 5, column 565, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...recommend everyone to visit that place. I really forgot my problems while I was t...
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Line 5, column 671, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ach, listening to the sound of the waves , breathing healthy air and also listen t...
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Line 6, column 162, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[10]
Message: The adverb 'never' is usually put between 'would' and 'forget'.
Suggestion: would never forget
...rienced in Isfahan was something that I never would forget. Not only its historical places were wo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, really, second, so, while, at least, for example, for instance, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 13.8261648746 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 31.0 11.0286738351 281% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 81.0 43.0788530466 188% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2288.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 510.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.4862745098 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75217629947 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42735769188 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.411764705882 0.524837075471 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 708.3 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.4114196231 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.3333333333 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.25 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.875 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0649717614873 0.236089414692 28% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0236040407982 0.076458572812 31% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0396045836116 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0410392315577 0.150856017488 27% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0219017152031 0.0645574589148 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.76 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.81 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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