Friendship is essential part in our life, furthermore, friends are people who enjoy with them share each other our thoughts and we have a beautiful memories between us, the question is whether keeping a few friends with long time better than make a new friend, this can be weight in many aspects, in my perceptive, I prefer do not concur with the statement that a specific friend for long time is more acceptable than making a new friends, I will elaborate on a couple reason in the following paragraph to explain my point of view.
First, and foremost, making a lot of friend is more beneficial, this is mainly due to the fact that by doing so, especially in a strange place like when student recently attain to college in first year can make friend easily, and be familiar with new situation, instead, if person cannot be able to make a friendship, he will feel frustrated and uncomfortable in new environment, furthermore, this will be effect his academic performance, for instance, my friend sally, she is very shy, and she cannot make friendship easily, when she enrolled in a college last year, in the first year, she faced very hard days,and get depression because she missed her closely friend, in addition she does not have the ability to make a new friends, as a result she failed. It is a good thing when you keep friendship with your old friend but you should willing to make a new friend in some situation, and when you need that.
Second, knowing many and new people expand our horizence, this is mainly because, we can share knowledge and information between as, furthermore, making friend is beneficial, they can help us if we searching for job, therefore new friends, mean a high opportunity for communication.
To sum up, this statement is not as persuasive as it stands, this mainly due to expositions which are mentioned above. That show us how a new and large number of friends is important and beneficial for individuals.
Friendship is essential part in our life, furthermore, friends are people who enjoy with them share each other our thoughts and we have a beautiful memories between us, the question is whether keeping a few friends with long time better than make a new friend, this can be weight in many aspects, in my perceptive, I prefer do not concur with the statement that a specific friend for long time is more acceptable than making a new friends, I will elaborate on a couple reason in the following paragraph to explain my point of view.
First, and foremost, making a lot of friend is more beneficial, this is mainly due to the fact that by doing so, especially in a strange place like when student recently attain to college in first year can make friend easily, and be familiar with new situation, instead, if person cannot be able to make a friendship, he will feel frustrated and uncomfortable in new environment, furthermore, this will be effect his academic performance, for instance, my friend sally, she is very shy, and she cannot make friendship easily, when she enrolled in a college last year, in the first year, she faced very hard days,and get depression because she missed her closely friend, in addition she does not have the ability to make a new friends, as a result she failed. It is a good thing when you keep friendship with your old friend but you should willing to make a new friend in some situation, and when you need that.
Second, knowing many and new people expand our horizence, this is mainly because, we can share knowledge and information between as, furthermore, making friend is beneficial, they can help us if we searching for job, therefore new friends, mean a high opportunity for communication.
To sum up, this statement is not as persuasive as it stands, this mainly due to expositions which are mentioned above. That show us how a new and large number of friends is important and beneficial for individuals.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: friend
...me is more acceptable than making a new friends, I will elaborate on a couple reason in...
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Suggestion:
...paragraph to explain my point of view. First, and foremost, making a lot of fri...
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...ome situation, and when you need that. Second, knowing many and new people expa...
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...portant and beneficial for individuals.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, second, so, therefore, for instance, in addition, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1610.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 339.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74926253687 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76486954765 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.533923303835 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 487.8 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 20.6003584229 29% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 56.0 20.1344086022 278% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 244.031191085 48.9658058833 498% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 268.333333333 100.406767564 267% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 56.5 20.6045352989 274% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 16.8333333333 5.45110844103 309% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.436272592456 0.236089414692 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.20775051338 0.076458572812 272% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.215204792013 0.0737576698707 292% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.271011382913 0.150856017488 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.235420893718 0.0645574589148 365% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 29.2 11.7677419355 248% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 31.56 58.1214874552 54% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 22.8 10.1575268817 224% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 11.16 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.35 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 26.5 10.002688172 265% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 24.4 10.0537634409 243% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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