Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that sport is a very important subject in the society which unfortunately did not receive enough attention and a financial assist from governments. However, improving this part and providing more budget to support athletics is essential and have several positive results for society. Therefore, I, to a great extent, agree with this idea that governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of the athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.
First and foremost, the success of athletics teams in national or international matches is really exciting for most people. It creates a positive mode and happiness for citizens. For example, during the world cup all people around the world prepare to follow it, by travelling to the host country or rescheduling their jobs to watch football matches through TV or etc. Moreover, people with different beliefs and culture, and by different education level love and follow sport programs. Thus, by increasing financial support from the athletics government would rise happiness in the country.
Another significant fact that should be taken into consideration is that additional support from sport can create a lot of new related jobs. For example, when China hosted the last Olympic matches, they obtain huge economic profit from it. In addition, they built some new stadiums in the poor region of their country which not only provides new facilities for citizens, but also made several job opportunity for them.
Finally, yet importantly, some people believe that the government should spend more money on support of art since it is on difficulty and there are a lot of unemployed artists. Nonetheless, this view is not entirely true. In all countries traditionally arts highly regarded by governments since they are known as a cultural representative of societies. So, this portion receives a sufficient budget, and maybe experts should be looking for some other reasons to address these problems.
On the basis of the reasons that were mentioned above, I am convinced that governments should spend more money on support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams, because it can increase happiness and health in society, and establish new jobs, and because sport need more financial support over arts.
- life today is easier and more comfortable than it was when your grandparent were children. 73
- TPO 49 Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends 63
- Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea? 73
- one of the best ways that parents can help their children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job. 70
- TPO 49 - The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends easily. 73
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, look, may, moreover, nonetheless, really, so, therefore, thus, for example, in addition, such as, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1986.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 375.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.296 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84297184103 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557333333333 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 604.8 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.6734047675 48.9658058833 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.125 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4375 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.6875 5.45110844103 178% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.452770376389 0.236089414692 192% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137673426187 0.076458572812 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.214375986896 0.0737576698707 291% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.282072044337 0.150856017488 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.211332652704 0.0645574589148 327% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 11.7677419355 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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