Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic team.
It has long been believed that governments should support athletics to boost the nation's image. In some sense, it is true that Olympic teams have an important influence on people's perspectives toward a country. However, I still believe that governments should increase their spending on arts than athletics for the following two reasons: government duty and benefits.
To begin with, governments should support the arts since they are responsible for investigating arts that can be easily ignored by private sponsors. Admittedly, governments can gain merits from state-sponsored sports teams in multiple ways, such as improved nation's image and increased revenue from an advertisement effect. However, a myriad of company also want to invest their money on the athletic teams. In contrast, artists, especially who are engaging in fine arts, are suffered from financial difficulties. Even worse, some of them give up pursuing their jobs because of the poverty. In this regard, financial supports from a government will be helpful to artists in such a condition, and this is what exactly governments should do.
Moreover, the development of arts helps governments increase their revenue by vitalizing tourism industry. Appreciating art pieces is one of the major events that tourists take into account of when they choose which country to visit. Amazing art galleries, beautiful architects, and any other art pieces in street can allure travelers to the country. For instance, many people go to French to see Mona Lisa since people cannot see the painting at any other place in the world but Paris. In contrast, people readily shift destination when they want to see sports game because sports teams usually travel around the world. In this regard, investing money on the arts is the surest way to provoke a tourism industry.
In conclusion, I think governments should increase their spending on supporting arts than athletics because artists usually go through hard time finding sponsors while athletes do not. Financial supports enable artists to focus on their work and create invaluable masterpieces, which will represent the country's cultural level.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...way to provoke a tourism industry. In conclusion, I think governments should ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, so, still, while, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, it is true, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1830.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 338.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.41420118343 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80213596522 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.579881656805 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 544.5 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.1644856374 48.9658058833 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.647058824 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8823529412 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.05882352941 5.45110844103 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.388675430619 0.236089414692 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109572786128 0.076458572812 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0954868297087 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.244646283393 0.150856017488 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0902942953723 0.0645574589148 140% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 10.9000537634 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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