Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.
In today’s turbulent economic environment, it is difficult for the government to decide which areas they should spend money on. Arts and sports are two essential entertainment pillar industries upon the development of the economy. While some people believe that it is important to fund the arts, others feel that it is preferable to prioritize athletics issues. Personally, I strongly believe that the government should provide more money to support the art community rather than to support athletics. I feel that way for two reasons which I will thoroughly elaborate on in this essay.
The first reason worth mentioning is, artworks such as paintings, sculptures, and photographs are essential components for spiritual life. That being said, enjoying these creative pieces of art is beneficial for our mental health and aesthetic taste. This is best demonstrated by my personal experience. When I just finished the National License exam, I felt very worried, even anxious about the result, and hardly slept well for a couple of days so I decided to attend the ceramic workshop. It was a long-term immersive experience, for which, I had to be very focused to design the best form of the mug. As a result, unexpectedly, after stepping out of there all my worries were gone and I feel relaxed. Furthermore, by seeing Sundae Kid’s gallery exhibition I adopted a new perspective on digital illustrations, which is, sometimes pictures can tell a better story than words do.
Another reason that I hold this opinion is, while funding sports seems to be a good idea, they already have sufficient investment. Obviously, there are so many private fundings for sports associations or even individual players with good performances. In contrast, art activities are predominantly undersupported by the public as well as the government. For instance, in art festivals, the artists have to pay large amount of service fees to the government if they want to be a part of the events which will worsen their financial situations, especially for those who are infamous. Thus, more funding and resources should be invested in the art community other than athletics.
In conclusion, I am the opinion that, artists and art exhibitions should receive more financial support from officials rather than well-invested sports industry. This way the arts can continue to embellish and, at the same time, benefit people's mental and emotional well-being and aesthetic taste of the public.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, so, thus, well, while, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2078.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 397.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23425692695 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9739759565 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.589420654912 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 638.1 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.3022945909 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.368421053 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8947368421 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.78947368421 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213102841199 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0642531741855 0.076458572812 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101859130545 0.0737576698707 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141808937638 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0943413357418 0.0645574589148 146% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.04 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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