Nowadays, the stress of life has brought about fierce competition among people, so which major should be learned becomes important for the young. To gain a competitive advantage, some people suggest choosing a major that allows one to start to work quickly. However, my attitude is just the opposite of such statements. If I were to give advice to my friend, I believe it is better to choose a major that offers him more employment opportunities in the future.
To begin with, my friend would have the chance to choose his favorite job if he has more employment opportunities in the future. This is necessary and important because a favorite job is beneficial and helpful for his future career. To be specific, a favorite job inspires people to learn and think, so it is good for them to improve their work efficiency and quality. Take my brother as an example. Architecture major took him five years to study, which is longer than a four-year major. After graduation, he received several offers from famous architecture companies and design institutes. He chose the company specializing in residential building design because that was where his interest lain in – to make people live comfortably. Now, he is a chief designer in this company. He said that his passion for his job makes him full of power to study something new about architecture, which helps him achieve success in the workplace in such a competitive society.
What is more, people can get a much higher salary if they choose a major that requires many years of study than that helps one get a degree sooner, because more employment opportunities and offers provide chances for them to choose the company providing the highest salary. Obviously, in a company, only a few people can be promoted and got a high salary, so most people have to endure an average salary level for a long time. If people choose a major that gets a degree sooner, it is hard for them to get a higher salary because majors of that kind are usually not irreplaceable, nor are they that professional. It is well acknowledged that uniqueness and irreplaceability determine one’s position in the workplace. In this case, choosing a major that requires a longer time of study but provides more professional knowledge and decent work opportunities with a competitive salary in the future works is better for young people.
Admittedly, some people may argue that beginning to work full-time quickly helps young people adapt to society earlier because school and society are different. However, adapting to society as soon as possible cannot guarantee an increased income nor one’s competitiveness. Weighing the pros and cons from a bigger picture, I suggest my friends choose the major that requires many years of study, considering his future career development.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, well, to begin with, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2353.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 469.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0170575693 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65364457471 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8888150015 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494669509595 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 766.8 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.549359786 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.047619048 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3333333333 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.85714285714 5.45110844103 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215693592109 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0632664180276 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0533163245543 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133540964834 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0500606682508 0.0645574589148 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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