If people want to contribute to society, which of the following is the best way?
1. Riding a bicycle or walking on foot
2. Recycling the waste
3. Buy local organic food
The societies have been changed during these years, and most people start protecting countries through various campaigns and social contribution. In this regard, some people are of the opinion that recycling the waste or buying local food are the best ways of contributing to the society that has numerous and valuable advantages, on the other extreme of the rope, the overwhelming majority of people believe that riding a bicycle or walking on foot are the most effective ways. While two groups take their positions, personally speaking, I deeply believe that the second group carries more weight. In the following paragraph, I will cogently explain my reasons to justify my points of view.
As the first and paramount reason, bicycles use no fuel; therefore, not only will air pollution be reduced, but also respiratory diseases will be reduced surprisingly. To be more specific, nowadays, the main cause of many diseases is related to air pollution so much so that various social organizations put a lot of effort to encourage people to use green fuels such as electric energy and contribute to society by riding a bicycle to reduce pollution and protect the environment. For instance, two years ago, the president of the Netherlands enacted effective and reasonable rules, developed long-term strategies, and organized various social groups to regulate people's behavior and encourage them to ride a bicycle or walking on foot. His government built diverse green cities, forbade using fuels in those, and didn’t allow anyone to drive a car. After four years, the health organization of Netherland announced that the rate of respiratory diseases has been reduced astonishingly because of high people contribution to riding bicycles and walking on foot.
The second reason coming to my mind to substantiate my viewpoint is riding a bicycle or walking on foot help people be healthy mentally. In other words, riding a bicycle gets away people from the noisy situation and terrific traffic in streets which helps them not to be angry and nervous; hence, they can improve their performance at their work. For example, empirical research conducted by some master students and experienced experts at a university shows that engineers riding a bicycle or walking on foot have higher performance in their tasks in various factories. Actually, riding bicycles and not being in traffic can help them get rid of their negative energy and alleviate their stress; thus, they can concentrate on their tasks and duties and deal properly and efficiently with various problems without any stress and anxieties; subsequently, they can fulfill their projects perfectly.
In conclusion, people contribution to riding a bicycle or walking on foot will remove pollution and eradicate some respiratory diseases from societies. Moreover, these campaigns will give rise to the improvement of people’s performance and social productivity.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 267, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...;s performance and social productivity.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, hence, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 29.0 13.8261648746 210% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2473.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 461.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36442516269 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88357244543 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529284164859 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 767.7 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 78.4306062708 48.9658058833 160% => OK
Chars per sentence: 164.866666667 100.406767564 164% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.7333333333 20.6045352989 149% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 5.45110844103 183% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266903730933 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.09181450583 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0867062493967 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162549244695 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0411948614286 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.2 11.7677419355 163% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.57 58.1214874552 56% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 10.1575268817 159% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.4 10.9000537634 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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