If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would you change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.
If there is anything that I would like to change about my hometown, it would be to get the new Steel manufacturing industry closed. I never liked the idea of industry coming to my hometown for the fear of stress on the environment and beginning of many other social problems, which to my horror, have become a sad reality now.
To begin with, the industry is causing a turmoil in the ecological balance of my once beautiful and pristine town. In a span of half a decade, it has managed to remove all the quail birds from the place and I have heard many people complain about the acidic rain which destroyed their crops last year. To add to the misery, this industrial plant is not far from the town and all its toxics and effluents are directly discharged into the main river body, ‘The Loku River’, of my city. Not to forget the constant noise pollution and addition of innumerable and unnecessary vehicles on the road because of it.
While the proponents of the industry try their best to take the public attention away from the detrimental effects the industry has on the environment and try to focus our attention on its success of providing employment and bringing economic prosperity in the town, they fail to paint the complete picture, in most likelihood, on purpose. Our town has enjoyed more than 90% literacy rate since the last two decade and was one of the first town of my state to achieve this. Because of this, people never had difficulty in finding jobs and well-off on their own and needed no assistance, if not intervention, from an industrial plant to boost the employment rate.
Other notable and often complained about phenomenon which the industry brought with it was the concept of ‘load-shedding’. An alien concept before the industry established, it has now become a common accepted problem and people are, unfortunately, trying to live with it. It is sad to see how ephemeral is public-memory because our town enjoyed electricity 24x7 five years back but the immense need for power by the industrial-plant has forced the authorities to distribute electricity judiciously and cut power daily.
To conclude, I am a strong advocate that the industrial plant established in my town should be taken down and the town should be bestowed with the same prosperity it once had a decade ago.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, well, while, as for, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1943.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 400.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8575 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95674546588 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5475 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 615.6 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.3008576327 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.461538462 100.406767564 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.7692307692 20.6045352989 149% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.15384615385 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0420726085259 0.236089414692 18% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0199943975695 0.076458572812 26% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0454744414456 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0278889254375 0.150856017488 18% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0400976770503 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 11.7677419355 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.5 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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