If you could create a new invention, what product would you make?
Use specific details to explain why this invention is necessary.
I had a lot of dreams, but my most desirable one is to fly freely and comfortably in the clear blue sky, and so if I could create a new invention, I would definitely create the personal flying machine.
People have long dreamed of flying in the sky since ancient times, and certainly, with the advancement of technology, people have partially fulfilled this long-term desire by creating a lot of different kinds of airplanes and jets. Nonetheless, instead of an airplane that I will need to procure a ticket and go to an airport to take, I want to have a personal flying machine that can be used as conveniently as driving a car. This personal flying machine will be extremely valuable to me and humanity, as I shall discuss below.
Motivated by the pursuit of traveling across the globe, I want to have a personal flying machine. In this way, I am able to cross the high mountains and wide rivers at ease, getting to any out-of-the-road destinations where cars and airplanes don't have access to instantly. Moreover, this machine will enable me to enjoy the gorgeous scenery with a bird's-eye-view, which will be an exceptionally incredible experience for a terrestrial creature like me. For example, I can utilize the flying machine to fly across the amazing Great Canyon or view the beautiful night in Hong Kong.
Besides personal benefits, I believe that a flying machine can benefit humanity as a whole, especially in emergencies. When a house is on fire, it is often difficult for the firefighters to come to the rescue if the floor is too high. Nevertheless, if the firefighters can use a flying machine, they can reach a very high place and save more people. In addition to the fire situation, flying machines are also a practical tool for rescuing people in the water. I have seen so many scenes of a person stuck in the middle of a rapid river on television. The rescue team doesn't have access to the person, which leaves them to have no choice but to watch the person be divulged by the water just in front of their eyes. I am very depressed by these scenes, and I believe that we can reverse this kind of situation if the rescue team is equipped with flying machines.
Every day, people come up with plenty of new ideas and inventions to fulfill humanity's wildest dreams. However, I truly believe that among all the ideas and inventions, gaining control over the sky is arguably the most profound one, and the personal flying machine can not only fulfill my dream but also change the course of history.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'invention'.
Suggestion: invention
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Suggestion: don't
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
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Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'humanitys the wildest'.
Suggestion: humanitys the wildest
... of new ideas and inventions to fulfill humanitys wildest dreams. However, I truly believe that a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, nonetheless, so, for example, in addition, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2081.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 444.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68693693694 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7471892432 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527027027027 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 663.3 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.880995455 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.411764706 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1176470588 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.29411764706 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0671491514239 0.236089414692 28% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0234009215664 0.076458572812 31% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0326439672464 0.0737576698707 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0504889159718 0.150856017488 33% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0345942304289 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.22 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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