Imagine you could improve the town where you live by changing one important thing about it Which of the following would you choose to do Build additional parks Construct more libraries Improve public transportation

All of people want to improve their country and I am one of those people. There are lot of thing that if you do it will be our country is better. But if choose me that one of the these three thing. I will choose the improve public libraries. Now I will discuss why I pick this reason.
Firstly, it help us to reduce traffic jams in my country there are lot of car jams this problem makes air pollution so it is danger for our environment because the smoke that come from the cars makes this problem.
In addition, congestion of cars it lose our time. For example, now, I live in Istanbul the traffic jams start when people go to school or work and when they returned to home so it take lot of time. For example, I remember when I was going to school I used to go to school two hours before the school opened because my school was far from my home.
Furthermore, this thing will increase number of tourists. For example when I go to the city for tourism, I like to go by metro to see the city, and this became with me when I went for tourism with my family to Germany when the plane landed and we got out of the airport we decided to go by metro instead of taxi in order to see the city.
In conclusion, In my opinion, this is the first thing that make our town. Because this reason will make us live in a pure atmosphere and it will make us to conserve our time and develop our country.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, so, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1117.0 1977.66487455 56% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 274.0 407.700716846 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.07664233577 4.8611393121 84% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.15154265797 2.67179642975 81% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 212.727598566 64% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.496350364964 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 359.1 618.680645161 58% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.8655698776 48.9658058833 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.9230769231 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0769230769 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.38461538462 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0868494740988 0.236089414692 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0532484757942 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0644961666975 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0556750920572 0.150856017488 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0836251593948 0.0645574589148 130% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.54 58.1214874552 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 6.38 10.9000537634 59% => Coleman_liau_index is low.
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.93 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 86.8835125448 45% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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