Imagine you want to get better grades in school, or get a promotion or a raise at work. Which of the following would you take?
- Do more work than existing requirements
- Participate more actively in group discussions, or contribute your own ideas
There is no shortage of opinion on what people should do to get a better grade or a promotion at work. If I were forced to choose, I would definitely select to participate more in group discussion. It is my firm belief that this decision will be much more beneficial for a number of reasons, and I will develop those ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, by participating in group discussion,you will know which part you have problems with. To be specific, other people may point out things you don’t do well, which you haven’t realized before. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. When I was preparing for my endodontic class final project presentation, I was very worried that I wouldn't do well and would get a bad score. Fortunately, my friends arranged a small group meeting where we discussed the topic and told each other which part we can improve to make our presentation better. As a result, I was well-prepared to present my final project and was able to get an A from this class.
Secondly, joining the group discussion is beneficial for your connection. This is because when you join a group discussion, you will meet a lot of new people and expand your social circle. These people may be able to help you with work’s promotion. Drawing from my sister’s experience, she happened to meet a company’s CEO through a marketing group discussion and they got along really well. A few months later, she got a promotion to be a manager because the CEO thought she had a quality for this position based on her performance in group discussion.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that participating more in group discussion is a better choice to get a better grade or a promotion. This is because you will realize which part you have to improve and you can expand your connection.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, really, second, secondly, so, well, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1558.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 331.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70694864048 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88227022968 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.522658610272 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 475.2 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.4898684933 48.9658058833 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.375 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6875 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.375 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.314095099002 0.236089414692 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111773964971 0.076458572812 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0730351045041 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.222325445172 0.150856017488 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0725489738771 0.0645574589148 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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