Imagine that you want to improve your performance in order to get better grades (marks) at school or to get a promotion or higher pay at work. You are considering the following ways:
- Doing additional work or extra assignments beyond what is required
- Participating more actively and contributing your own ideas more frequently in group discussions.
Which ONE of these two actions do you think would be more helpful for improving your performance? Why?
Studing and working are two core phases of a person’s life. And I believe that doing extra work can both improve academic achievement as well as help with career development.
First, doing more assignments than what is required can help students get better grades. Most assignments consist of exercise questions. And doing more of these offers students more opportunities to identify the problems they have in solving such questions. And they can then either refer to textbooks for solutions or ask their teachers to explain what they have difficult with to them, hence improving their ability to solve similar problems correctly in the future. Also, when they have done a considerable amount of exercise questions, they will be able to find general rules about how to solve exam questions, and ultimately improves their efficiency at doing so. And when students have mastered acuraccy and speed, they will be likely to solve more questions correctly during major exam, thus improving their grades.
Second, doing additional work benefits people’s career development. Typically, the more work people do, the higher output they can generate, meaning more income for their business. When the business directors realize this increase in income, they are likely to notice those valuable employees who have done extra work to help boost their revenue. If they wish to continue have this extra revenue in the future, they will either promote those employees or offer them other pays. Alternatively, if the directors are not aware of such employees and have done nothing in return, these employees can just change to better paying jobs by demonstrating the value they can create to business owners. Either way, doing more jobs would help those employees’ careers.
To conclude, doing more work can help students achieve higher grades and employees with their career development.
- Some people think that if companies prohibit sending emails to staff on weekend or during other time out of office hours Staff s dissatisfactions with their companies will decrease Others think this will not reduce the overall dissatisfactions among staff 73
- Imagine that you want to improve your performance in order to get better grades marks at school or to get a promotion or higher pay at work You are considering the following ways Doing additional work or extra assignments beyond what is required Participa 76
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Younger school children ages five to ten should be required to study art and music in addition to math language science and history Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 90
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Many people nowadays spend too much money on their pets dogs cats or other animals although there are better uses for their money 83
- Some people prefer to go shopping in a big supermarket Some people prefer to go shopping in small stores near the community Which do you prefer Explain why 81
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 135, Rule ID: BOTH_AS_WELL_AS[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
...k can both improve academic achievement as well as help with career development. First,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, if, second, so, then, thus, well, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1590.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 299.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31772575251 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57921772395 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.538461538462 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 482.4 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.5762937707 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.0 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9333333333 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.26666666667 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158768696314 0.236089414692 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0695570310632 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0471573965617 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113178724089 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0137342863167 0.0645574589148 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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