Independent Writing Task Some parent offer their school age children money for each high grade mark they get in school Do you think this is a good idea Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

Personally, I believe that it is a good idea to give some practical prizes, like money, as the reward when the scool-age children performance well on exam. I feel this way for two reasons, which i will explore in the following essay.

First of all, this way would encourage the children to do their best and pursue the best score instead of just taking the exam and learn nothing. This incentive may sounds a little bit interest-oriented, but it is really effective and practical. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. As I am a 9th grade student in junior high scool, there is a huge exam for every student in this age. The student's grade in this exam is the essential requirment in the application of senior high school and it is also the most important one. Besides, many senior high school would offer lots of scholarship for the student who get the high score. During the time I studied in the junior high scool, my parents would give me some practical reward, like cookies or money, to encourage me to get the high score on every test. Finally, in that last and most inportant exam, I performanced pretty well and got the very high score. Afterward, I thought it is the result of this practical prizes.

Secondly, this way could save lots of time for parents to think about what incentive reward should be. To thik about the rewards for each time that the children get the good score would cost much time and might not have really positive consequence. For instance, I remember that one time I took the fianl exam at the elementary school. I studied very hard on this exam and really performanced well on it. My parents also spent lots of time to think about how to reward me. But I was

In conclusion, I an of the opinion that parents can use some practical prizes to reward their children for the high performance. This is because the positive incentive and can

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, first, may, really, second, secondly, so, well, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1557.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 340.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.57941176471 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55776685417 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.473529411765 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 486.0 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.1774606482 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.5 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8888888889 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.279778845306 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0880334601792 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0480769068964 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171427494287 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.032692370613 0.0645574589148 51% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.85 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 86.8835125448 58% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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