It is better to have a broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject.
As our today’s world is uninterruptedly developing, the determining role of knowledge cannot be denied. Although the knowledge indisputable paves the way to achieve an easy life, there has always been a controversial issue among scholars over the idea of whether having a wide knowledge of many academic subjects overweigh specializing in one particular subject or vice versa. I firmly hold the notion that people should gain widespread knowledge in various subject matters instead of just mastering one particular filed, the two compelling reasons of which are elaborated in the following essay.
To begin with, given the competitive environment of the business world, almost companies and institutes today are willing to employ individuals who are not one-dimensional, which mean that they can cope with multiple careers simultaneously. As most corporations are willing to optimize their operations and reduce additional costs, they try to integrate a few related special fields to employ fewer multi-speciality people. My own experience can be a compelling example of what I mean. Last year while I and my classmate were looking for a job position in relating to my academic field following our graduation, we emailed our resume to several eminent companies. My friend invited to much more employment interviews than me due to he was a specialist in two other academic field such as computer science and French language. Although we were both eventually hired, he could engage immediately in the best company in our country with a higher salary than mine. This example indicates why mastering and specializing in at least one another academic field in addition to our own subject can provide people with much more employment opportunities in their future life.
Secondly, learning several academic fields can help people to become professional person in their future special subject. Indeed, many individuals master-skilled in their special field in the world are those who have some knowledge of other fields and have the ability to deal with the problems of their expertise. For example, sports coaches at the professional level have sufficient mastery of psychology and physical sciences to overcome the problems that arise for his own team and players. Moreover, mastering an international language is an essential characteristic for a politician who works in the cosmopolitan politic area in addition to profound focusing in their special field. As a result of this, learning several academic fields can even help people to become more professional in their specific subjects.
In a nutshell, having considered all the aforementioned reasons, I am of the opinion that it is preferred for people to learn many academic fields than being mastered in one specific field. Not only does it provide people with many opportunities in hiring in the best affairs, but it also even helps them become more professional in their special fields.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 683, Rule ID: TO_TOO[2]
Message: Did you mean 'too'?
Suggestion: too
...al eminent companies. My friend invited to much more employment interviews than me...
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Line 3, column 775, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'field' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'fields'.
Suggestion: fields
... was a specialist in two other academic field such as computer science and French lan...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, while, at least, for example, i mean, in addition, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2489.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 465.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35268817204 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05702536675 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537634408602 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 798.3 618.680645161 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 49.6842626146 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.411764706 100.406767564 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.3529411765 20.6045352989 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.17647058824 5.45110844103 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.290737531501 0.236089414692 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0934104700277 0.076458572812 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0857063331189 0.0737576698707 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200162947707 0.150856017488 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0723642479489 0.0645574589148 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 11.7677419355 148% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 58.1214874552 61% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 10.9000537634 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 86.8835125448 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.002688172 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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