It is better to work for business owned by someone you do not know than work for a business owned by your family.
work, an essential element of quality life, has been valued and even triggered heated discussions over for whom people work. Finding a career in one's relative's company, in some people's view, is advisable. contrary to these people's opinion is my perspective that people should work for a corporation owned by someone they have no relationship with, due to their contribution to efficiency and personal development.
What must be prioritized is that working for a business owned by strangers, instead of working for family members, for a long time will boost working efficiency by reducing wasted time and errors. To begin with, it is in others' companies that people take full advantage of their time at work. In clarity, people working for others will be under strict regulations and will allocate much of their time to searching for information, writing reports, and negotiating with clients; however, such time will be wasted if they work for their family members. moreover, in a corporation owned by others, people will not commit many errors and can enhance their productivity. specifically, employees working for strangers are more willing to communicate with others for suggestions, thus fewer mistakes will be made. On the contrary, errors at work will be abundant when employees work for a business of their families, as relatives will generally tolerate their mistakes.
What should be equally worth discussing is that working for a stranger's business, in the long term, will benefit personal development by boosting their interpersonal skills and independence. First, chances are that working for strangers would develop their interpersonal skills. In detail, at strangers' companies, employees will encounter a wide range of people from diverse family backgrounds, social classes, and even cultures, stimulating them to communicate and improve interpersonal abilities. On the other hand, social techniques can hardly be developed when employees work in a business owned by their families. moreover, embarking on a career in the company of strangers will help cultivate independence. specifically, working in others' companies makes it significant for employees to deal with problems and undertake their responsibilities; however, people are inclined to rely on others when they work for family members.
efficiency, essential in work, will be boosted by people working for strangers. personal development, crucial for each person, will be improved when they are engaged in the business of others. To conclude, only by working for a company owned by others can people reap the maximum benefits.
- Burning coal in power plants produces a waste product called coal ash a material that contains small amounts of potentially harmful chemicals Environmentalists in the United States are concerned about the damage such harmful chemicals may be doing to the 80
- Burning coal in power plants produces a waste product called coal ash a material that contains small amounts of potentially harmful chemicals Environmentalists in the United States are concerned about the damage such harmful chemicals may be doing to the 80
- Burning coal in power plants produces a waste product called coal ash a material that contains small amounts of potentially harmful chemicals Environmentalists in the United States are concerned about the damage such harmful chemicals may be doing to the 80
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- TPO 44 Integrated Writing 80
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Work
work, an essential element of quality life, ...
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Line 1, column 146, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...r whom people work. Finding a career in ones relatives company, in some peoples view...
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Line 1, column 206, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Contrary
...ny, in some peoples view, is advisable. contrary to these peoples opinion is my perspect...
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Line 1, column 224, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
...s view, is advisable. contrary to these peoples opinion is my perspective that people s...
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Line 4, column 552, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Moreover
... if they work for their family members. moreover, in a corporation owned by others, peop...
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Line 4, column 667, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Specifically
...ors and can enhance their productivity. specifically, employees working for strangers are mo...
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Line 7, column 620, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Moreover
... in a business owned by their families. moreover, embarking on a career in the company o...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Specifically
...ngers will help cultivate independence. specifically, working in others companies makes it s...
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Line 10, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Efficiency
...when they work for family members. efficiency, essential in work, will be boosted by ...
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Line 10, column 81, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Personal
...oosted by people working for strangers. personal development, crucial for each person, w...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, moreover, so, thus, on the contrary, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2214.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 403.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.49379652605 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0011193925 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.478908188586 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 677.7 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.59856630824 10% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.2118534867 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.0 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3888888889 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.22222222222 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.346685577953 0.236089414692 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.146044927049 0.076458572812 191% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0956356222193 0.0737576698707 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.259076538868 0.150856017488 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.047051478309 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 58.1214874552 70% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.86 10.9000537634 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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