No one does not welcome success. However, most of us are not being "blessed" all the time, and frequent failures always come out of expectations. Should we value the success itself more, or the way how we deal with loss? I believe that it is more vital to face failures optimistically with hope than success.
To begin with, I am of the opinion that an optimistic attitude is critical to adjust our psychological statement from being defeated. As we know, the consequence of a particular incident can significantly affect our moods, also our confidence in the future. An optimistic way of thinking contributes to healthier psychological well-being and helps us overcome our inner barrier to participate fully. My personal experience is a compelling illustration of this. I can recall my first year in the university that I was overwhelmed by the coming academic pressures, for I found it was hard for me to keep everything up, and the anxiety disorder stopped me from fully participating. Missing works and unsatisfying performance soon accumulated into a mountain and pressed me to severe depression. Inevitably, I was defeated by the psychological stress with disappointment to the failure and had to pause the school for medication and therapy.
Furthermore, an optimistic statement to face failure gives us a clear mind to conclude from the past and prepare more sufficiently for the future. I admit that the mood of defeating will be greater motivation for some people to recover from the failure. However, for most of us, I think it is fair to say that failings bring the destruction of our confidence and disturb our reasoning ability when we are overwhelmed by negative emotions. For instance, even though I could not continue my freshman year and pause the school, I did not stay in the statement of a disappointment for too long. Instead, I decided to lay down all my academic burdens, temporarily moved out from the student house, and forced myself to make a travelling plan and go with it even I was too depressed to have any energy. Fortunately, I soon walked out from the shadow of academic failure and consciously analysed why I failed to keep up with my studies and rearranged everything after restarted school. Luckily, I was more able to manage my time and found a more efficient way to study. I found catching up with all assignments was not that hard, and I got a pretty grade for most of my subjects.
In conclusion, I think what is crucially essential for us is to face difficulties and failures with smiles rather than pursuing success eagerly without any rest. This is because what is more important than one success is our psychological capacity when failing comes and positioning our emotions right to understand how to fix the past.
- After completing high school students should take at least a year off to work or travel before they begin studying at a university 70
- TPO 64 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is more important to read or watch news presented by people whose views are different from your own than it is to read or watch news presented by those whose views are similar to your own Use 90
- TPO 63 73
- TPO 52 integrated writing task 81
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Physical exercise is more important to older people than to young people 70
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, well, as to, for instance, i think, in conclusion, to begin with, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2309.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 468.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93376068376 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65116196802 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11098416549 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523504273504 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 744.3 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.7005707744 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.952380952 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2857142857 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174127666181 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0571298887477 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0573407619596 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128003571253 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0570391296491 0.0645574589148 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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