It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours.

Submitted by hamidbin on Sat, 02/02/2019 - 09:53

What are the impacts of modern life on the young generation is an essential question.
One may opt technology has made children less creative than they were in the past. I disagree with the proposition due to the fact that peoples under the technology shown a proper performance and the nature of the technology demands creativity.
From ancient times to present days humans added many novel devices to this world, they started with a wheel and prolong it with pyramids, engine, airplanes, the internet, and so on. After the period of technology which means after the 1950s, new inventions, are not less important than their pioneers before the 1950s. Youth who grew under the rule of the technology showed many talents and creativity, they achieved miraculous things that they were unimaginable for people before them. For instance, Bill gates who is the founder of Microsoft contributed to world progress and its prosperity, And Steve jobs, he inspired the designed of electronic tools which they moved the border of convenience. Or younger fellows like Elan mask who wants to die in mars and has done great deeds to make the dream of colonizing of mars one step closer to reality. Therefore, such people which I name them children of the technology, illustrate how technology could ease humans’ way through the future.
Technology introduces short ways for humans’ works, it is in its nature, it was to meant to do such function in this world. Many calculations were impossible before the advent of technology, its widen the range of activities that people can do, and by these means, technology participates in man's creativity. For example, by new media, it is possible for students in the schools to practice in modern methods of education. Lectures with computers, visual realities to teaching them, such procedures would improve their performance and their ability to be creative.
Thus with all above in mind, there are instances which show technology can produce creative people even better than the persons in the past. And technology creation was intended to provide novel tools that can contribute to humans' inventions.

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Independent TOEFL Writing

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 2, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...nce and their ability to be creative. Thus with all above in mind, there are insta...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, therefore, thus, as to, for example, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1796.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 350.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13142857143 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75570799081 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585714285714 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 555.3 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.3249046551 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.733333333 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3333333333 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.46666666667 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0528975440317 0.236089414692 22% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0193241824421 0.076458572812 25% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0243689074333 0.0737576698707 33% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0252337296104 0.150856017488 17% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0205523268956 0.0645574589148 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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