The professor claims that the one specific painting of women's face contribute to Rembrandt works while she cast out the three reasons which the reading passage argues to prove why this painting removed from the Rembrandt's catalog.
To begin with, according to the lecture the coat she is wearing colored a hundred years after the original painting has been made and this clearly explains the inconsistency which the reading point out about the different type of the cloth in the picture.
Secondly, the professor holds the idea of later painting and concludes the first color of cloth which is under her face was not dark this view refutes the reading argument about the error in painting light and shadow.
Finally, the lecture suggests some people changed painting panel after Rembrandt because they think it could show the painting more precious this information rebutting the passage discussion on the distinction between simple wood panel which used by the artist and the several pieces glued panel now we can see.
- TOEFL Sample essay : integrated essay from TPO1 3
- It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. 3
- TOEFL Sample essay : integrated essay from TPO3 3
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- TPO 1 Task 1 38
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...g removed from the Rembrandts catalog. To begin with, according to the lecture ...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, second, secondly, so, while, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 10.4613686534 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 12.0772626932 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 22.412803532 49% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 30.3222958057 73% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 861.0 1373.03311258 63% => OK
No of words: 168.0 270.72406181 62% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.125 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60020574368 4.04702891845 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34586497544 2.5805825403 91% => OK
Unique words: 108.0 145.348785872 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.642857142857 0.540411800872 119% => OK
syllable_count: 250.2 419.366225166 60% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.23620309051 36% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 13.0662251656 31% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 42.0 21.2450331126 198% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 36.0303691349 49.2860985944 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 215.25 110.228320801 195% => OK
Words per sentence: 42.0 21.698381199 194% => OK
Discourse Markers: 16.75 7.06452816374 237% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0115844850632 0.272083759551 4% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00773094598306 0.0996497079465 8% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0133903912332 0.0662205650399 20% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.00773094598306 0.162205337803 5% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0133903912332 0.0443174109184 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 23.7 13.3589403974 177% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.31 53.8541721854 69% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.5 11.0289183223 168% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.36 12.2367328918 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.42419426049 108% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 63.6247240618 57% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 10.7273730684 163% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.8 10.498013245 179% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 11.2008830022 170% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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